desert eye

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by floyd4peace, Jun 12, 2006.

  1. floyd4peace

    floyd4peace Member

    my vacant friend
    opened it's eyes to me
    all was hopeless
    but then i could see

    the motion of matter
    incomplete but all
    then i'll come to see her
    when alas the dunes fall

    it's all opened beauty
    like a rose
    though more pretty
    the invisible ocean
    known as the desert
    never leaves me

    there is endlessness here
    there is solitude and fear
    there are you and I
    there is death in the air

    our skeletons fall
    one motion i recall
    gentle rhythm
    hums the sand
    a single thought crawls

    through a vast
    open sea shore
    you awaken
    greet the order

    venture back to your ally
    to freedom
    to silence
    read the opening sky
    see kingdom
    see blindness

    inhale the desert's soul
    become ancient
    become old

    then gaze into the eyes
    of an estranged passerby
    the story begins a new
    the caravan continues
     
  2. hippywitch

    hippywitch Member

    Nice:) I love the desert too.

    Michelle
     
  3. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

    Wow dude, this is excellent writing. It has a sort of cadence to it that I really dig.

    it's all opened beauty
    like a rose
    though more pretty
    the invisible ocean
    known as the desert
    never leaves me

    Very nice. I could probably quote the whole thing, really, but I did really like how you wrote that.
     
  4. zigzag_rabbit

    zigzag_rabbit Member

    growing up in the mojave i still have a love for the desert and reading a poem so well made about it was wonderfull, thank you
     
  5. floyd4peace

    floyd4peace Member

    Thanks for all the lovely compliments. I appreciate every one. The desert has always seemed a mystical place to me where one can find themself or lose themself in an instant and I figured it was time i pieced together a poem about it. thanks again

    Kaivon
     

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