cedar and arbutus

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by standingdeer, Dec 28, 2004.

  1. standingdeer

    standingdeer Member

    Rapture along these shores
    cedar and arbutus twist with the formal wind
    blowing in from the north
    carrying the resentment of snow
    layerd high on mountain peeks
    seen in distances on a clear day

    Island after island
    motionless landscape
    eagles move through town
    watching from a pine tree
    in deliberation
    as wide as its wings

    Standingdeer
     
  2. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

    I can imagine your words in picture form, standingdeer. An undisturbed landscape, untouched, uncorrupted, perfect. Only touched softly by nature.
     
  3. kidder

    kidder Member

    Your line breaks are great. Your poem reads easily and I like its moody undertone. Just watch our for minor inconsistencies- eagles 'moving' through town won't be watching from a pine tree.
     
  4. standingdeer

    standingdeer Member

    yes, it depends on the perspective in which you are seeing. If you knew these eagles you would get it.

    Thank you
    Standingdeer
     

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