caught

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by helen-maple, Sep 16, 2004.

  1. helen-maple

    helen-maple Member

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    in my dreams

    i am all alone
    the sky
    is sending
    down
    a most precious
    gift of rain.

    i wake up and he is sleeping
    on the other side
    of the bed.
    i watch his mouth
    open slightly.

    mornings
    are difficult
    sometimes.

    awake,
    caught
    in the
    game
    of reality
    once again.
     
  2. fulmah

    fulmah Chaser of Muses

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    Lovely work here, Helen! I especially liked the 2nd and 3rd stanza's! Such a smooth ride you've taken me on.... thanks for sharing :)
     
  3. kidder

    kidder Member

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    A nice effort at concrete poetry too!The visual is working. A drop of rain builds and dies and builds again.
     
  4. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    Really enjoyed this one, Thank you much~*
     
  5. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

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    "Mornings are difficult sometimes!" Gorgeous.
     
  6. saffronfrancisburnet

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    this is full of the unknown moment of a day
    the morning always awakens our path...

    love n peace from saff
     
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