Broken Pianos in the Street

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by ripple23, Jun 6, 2004.

  1. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

    Nothing but your hands, blue flames, the signature of night.

    Something that the ocean and you can afford...

    the way a poem breaks on several waves.

    entire gardens bend to such a passing

    dawn finds an answer to questions like your eyes

    and the leaves bleed violets on the toes of someone far away.

    From the island of a footprint

    they imagine the coasts of undiscovered countries.

    I want to depend on their pale beaches,

    those who travel upon them become light.

    And those with the history of longing in their voices,

    they are like the sighs of someone far away.
     
  2. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

    shit, this one sucks!
     
  3. i enjoyed this...

    i love the line

    dawn finds an answer to questions like your eyes

    makes me think of the reflections we see in others ..

    keep writing
    how we seek for life in questions in answers
    in us...

    love n peace from saff
     
  4. littleskinny

    littleskinny Member

    'T ain't crap. tis good. I like bending gardens, poems breaking on waves and leaves bleeding violets on toes!!

    It's an odd little poem because it thinks a lot. So many enchanting secrets round each corner, it gives more and more with each read.
     
  5. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

    yea it certainly is a thinking poem, interesting
     
  6. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

    Although, i dont understand why its called broken pianos in the street
     
  7. Fierce_Flawless

    Fierce_Flawless Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

    cuz love is a piano dropped from a four-story window, and he was in the wrong place at the wrong time, you know
     
  8. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

    well if it is, like you say, a thinking poem, then that is something to think about!

    thank you for the replies.
     
  9. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

    hmm yes thats fair enough

    but i'd still like some reasoning from the poet themselves to stand along with my thinking.
     
  10. ripple23

    ripple23 Member

    well... if you stick around for a while and read what i write, or if you have been around from the old forums, you'll find that my titles usually have nothing to do with the poem.... i usually take them from other poems written by other people, they most likely have meaning if you read the poems from which i take them from... but they're basically useless... i do however like the mysterious effect that it gives the poems. I despise poems that have the exact words in the title and in the poem for some reason.
     
  11. Spyder

    Spyder La dah de dah

    hmm fair enough :)

    i am from the old forums, i never used to post in the poetry forum tho!

     
  12. I liked it... I felt like I had to keep turning and watching my back, because I felt like something was creeping up on me... like echoes in an alley...
     

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