bohemian city staggering forth from the bar in the fake dull moonlight of the city the cars going by clouds of exhaust billowing a man and a woman stand noticing the filth the city, dirty and orange floating in a sea of fog in my room now unmolested in the quiet the city rests uneasy below my window the rats large and fearless dine on the refuse of yesterdays lunch still yet full of motion a woman enters a waitress by day an addict by night something about her catches the eye washes over you like waves on the ocean under a full tide in my bed i sit lights out encased in the glow of neon drifting tasting the warmth of the grape, the wine becomes the blood of the city cheap yet still necessary the city grows from under the facade undisturbed by time no visage of past no visage of future immortal in the present
and yet who knows what horrors lurk beneath, in the sewers, amidst the refuge and deluge defecated out of sight and mind? *shudders* much love
Thanks for the kind words. This poem is something I have been messing around with. I was trying to capture a sort of Beat feel... similar to Charles Bukowski prose.
nice, man i love the bohemian ways and lifestyle and this one just signals it all. as it is , and though as it should be keep rockin
Good stuff man, i think you did capture that "beat" essense, that was the sort of feeling I got. Like reading a jack kerouac book or something, haha. Anyways, cool images
"something about her catches the eye washes over you like waves on the ocean under a full tide" You've trapped me in this spell of prose.. Rhythmic beats and scenes to catch the breath in my body. Terrifying, real, what lies beyond this veil...
good poem. unfortunately, i think a large number of people replying have absolutely no idea what you're trying to say, and just like the word bohemia.
Ha! Funny! I thought your first stanza was the best, it contained the strongest imagery. I have an overwhelming urge to punctuate for clarity and clean up some of the fluff, but that's just me. You have a good start here.