bohemian city

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by gonzo, May 8, 2004.

  1. gonzo

    gonzo Member

    bohemian city


    staggering forth from the bar
    in the fake dull moonlight of the city
    the cars going by
    clouds of exhaust billowing
    a man and a woman stand
    noticing the filth
    the city, dirty and orange
    floating in a sea of fog

    in my room now
    unmolested in the quiet
    the city rests uneasy
    below my window
    the rats large and fearless
    dine on the refuse
    of yesterdays lunch
    still yet full of motion

    a woman enters
    a waitress by day
    an addict by night
    something about her
    catches the eye
    washes over you
    like waves on the ocean
    under a full tide

    in my bed i sit
    lights out encased in
    the glow of neon drifting
    tasting the warmth of
    the grape,
    the wine becomes
    the blood of the city
    cheap yet still necessary

    the city grows
    from under the facade
    undisturbed by time
    no visage of
    past
    no visage of
    future
    immortal in the present
     
  2. I don't really even know what to say about this except that I love it.
     
  3. charredacacia

    charredacacia Member

    i love bohemia. what city is that?
     
  4. osiris

    osiris Senior Member

    and yet who knows what horrors lurk beneath, in the sewers, amidst the refuge and deluge defecated out of sight and mind?


    *shudders*

    much love :)
     
  5. tourmaline

    tourmaline Member

    i love your phrasing, it puts somewhat of a rhythm without binding it. free yet distinct
     
  6. gonzo

    gonzo Member

    Thanks for the kind words. This poem is something I have been messing around with. I was trying to capture a sort of Beat feel... similar to Charles Bukowski prose. :)
     
  7. Yeah it kind of reminded me of Allen Ginsburg, who is also a Beat poet.
     
  8. beerman1788

    beerman1788 Member

    nice, man i love the bohemian ways and lifestyle and this one just signals it all. as it is , and though as it should be

    keep rockin
     
  9. TrippinBTM

    TrippinBTM Ramblin' Man

    Good stuff man, i think you did capture that "beat" essense, that was the sort of feeling I got. Like reading a jack kerouac book or something, haha.

    Anyways, cool images :)
     
  10. Biida

    Biida Member

    "something about her
    catches the eye
    washes over you
    like waves on the ocean
    under a full tide"

    You've trapped me in this spell of prose.. Rhythmic beats and scenes to catch the breath in my body. Terrifying, real, what lies beyond this veil...
     
  11. Amazing,I adore all the imagery you give us.
     
  12. good poem. unfortunately, i think a large number of people replying have absolutely no idea what you're trying to say, and just like the word bohemia.
     
  13. Tyrsonswood

    Tyrsonswood Senior Moment

    ... Weird double post. Really weird.
     
  14. skyfire

    skyfire Member

    Ha! Funny!

    I thought your first stanza was the best, it contained the strongest imagery. I have an overwhelming urge to punctuate for clarity and clean up some of the fluff, but that's just me. You have a good start here.
     

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