be gentle everybody... For someone special

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by USNavyDeadHead, Jan 13, 2005.

  1. USNavyDeadHead

    USNavyDeadHead Member

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    This is my first real attempt at writing poetry since the one i wrote after my first son died(1996)...be gentle folks...


    so far away and yet so near
    your voice is gone yet still i hear
    the beating of your heart inside
    across the oceans dark and wide

    alone i sit and wander freely
    inside a mind you have completely
    my waters cold, your deserts hot
    i have you, yet i have you not

    a secret love i dare not hold
    a lady lovely and so bold
    rides waves of spirits through my soul
    and passion brings i cant control
     
  2. White Scorpion

    White Scorpion 4umotographer

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    Excellent. I don't know what to say!
     
  3. USNavyDeadHead

    USNavyDeadHead Member

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    thank you so much. i have just recently been inspired by someone very special to start writing again. i really appreciate the comment.
     
  4. gdhmomchild

    gdhmomchild Duct tape abuser

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    *puts away the baseball bat* Is duct tape gentle? *~lol~*
    A very nice poem. Welcome back from writers block.
     
  5. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    good stuff. definetly keep writing!!!!
     
  6. Hippievixen

    Hippievixen Lifetime Supporter Lifetime Supporter

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    absolutely lovely...

    *sighs*

    'alone i sit and wander freely
    inside a mind you have completely
    my waters cold, your deserts hot
    i have you, yet i have you not'

    it's *all* good, but that was the best part...
     
  7. USNavyDeadHead

    USNavyDeadHead Member

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    Thank you...it isnt nearly as lovely as who is was written for but i do my best.
     
  8. imaflake

    imaflake Member

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    It is just wonderful... More people should be as sentimental about their "special someone"
     
  9. inbloom

    inbloom as the crow flies...

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    who the fuck gave me a bad rep for posting this comment??? i was being serious when i said the poem was goood. i really liked it. :confused:
     

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