Another...

Another addiction to escape your addiction to love.
Another mental illness to escape your insanity.
Another eating disorder to make yourself beautiful.
Another sex partner to fill your loneliness.
Another slit to numb your heartache.

definately not one of my best...tell me what u think. compliments and critisism are welcome

 

I liked it. Good job!

 

thanks

 

Hey BHB, I don't know how you and FMC do it. You both just seem to pump out great ideas and poems at will. I'm jealous. It takes a while for me.


One criticism......I would drop the words 'to try' from every line. I think it sounds better when read out loud that way.

Peace,
Aidan.

 

FMB? ha yea it takes me awhile too but i write better wen im upset thats why most of mine are good but far in between.

ok ill fix it.

 

I think thats better.


Peace,
Aidan

 

ive seen better from you, but this ones excellent as well, i dont think ive seen a horrible one from you yet!

 

haha really...ive had plenty of bad ones that i simple threw away and started over

 

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