A Thousand Flames

Discussion in 'Poetry' started by lucyinthesky, Sep 2, 2005.

  1. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    ~a thousand flames~

    It's funny how we see things differently
    When we're slowly turning corners.
    I've never thought twice about
    The way the sun looks to me through glasses,

    until this afternoon.
    It's like that moment
    when you're small
    and you're looking out your window;
    when suddenly you realize
    you know exactly where you are.
    To a child,
    there's something reassuring
    about a reassurance so familiar.
    Driving in slow motion
    I think a lot more freely.
    Music always sounds better
    When i'm locked inside these walls.

    Wind flows off my fingers
    In rainbow trails and waves.
    And the hurricane inside of me
    Really gets me to start thinking...
    What if the whole entire sun
    really sat inside its' flower?
    A thousand flames trapped upon
    and within a thousand petals.
    Would it be too hot too touch,
    Or just warm enough to handle?


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    I'm feeling rusty, i haven't written anything in so long, that and i'm so tired i'm delirious...that entire thing probably sounds like shit. yeah, lines 3-4-5 are a rough flow....but those were the first lines that popped in my head that got me started on this. It sounds better just as one whole sentance, not broken up like i did... "I never thought twice about the way the sun looks through sunglasses, until this afternoon" see sounds better there. ah well...carry on kids.
     
  2. sylvanlightning

    sylvanlightning Prismatic Essence

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    I love it, and lose myself in the expanses of your vision.
    Very beautiful, thank you.
     
  3. Lozi

    Lozi Senior Member

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    i really .like it
     
  4. honeyhannah

    honeyhannah herbuhslovuh

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    yeah that was absolutely beautiful, eclipsing, and sentimental

    also very restorative
    way to go!!!
     
  5. lucyinthesky

    lucyinthesky Tie Dyed Soul

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    wow thanx guys. lol....i'm suprised even one person liked it, let alone 3! haha :rolleyes:
     
  6. pabsy

    pabsy Hip Forums Supporter HipForums Supporter

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    that was so beautiful Lucyinthesky.... thankyou for sharing it...
     
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