not a fan of rhyming poems, but this worked for me. Loved the lay out of it too, it just leaps from the page.
Really liked this poems flow and rhythm, especially the first two paragraghs. And you put your point across well. Nice.
They swam free, at great lengths as complacent as eels, soaking up tans, feasting on algae. They float with ease, down...
They blast so loud, so clear those mumbled soliloquies, spoken to mirrors and walls, nothing to do with madness just painless and convenient...
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