Wow, it only took you 3 & 1/2 years to get back to the thread you started. Have you had way too much school work? :-)
I like this. It's imaginative, attention grabbing, and a firsthand work of literary excellence. A refreshing style of sharing your creativity.
I think you have a lot of thought happening all at once. I think it needs something to pull it all together.
This is a very nice piece. But "your" in this sentence should be "you're"
http://www.freetranslation.com/ Try this, although I don't think it will rhyme after it is translated.
It's all too true........
The test I went to see the doctor because I had some pain When I take a deep breath It really is a strain He listened to my heart and lungs...
You remind me of................ (just kidding) This is a nice piece.
I agree, not lame. I enjoyed it.
Welcome...... Try humming into a cassette recorder, and then use (piano, guitar, etc.) whatever instrument you have, and translate your rythm...
Some of it is very different. I enjoyed reading them. Keep up the good work. I enjoy the change of "style".
Seems like a good start to me. Do you have any rythm picked out for these yet? Keep writing, this is good stuff.
Well, it doesn't nake sense to me. Sense to me.
I'm sure many young woman can relate (to some degree) to this piece. But poopzilla is right, that it sounds very personal.
Very nice piece. The style with which you began reminded me of Mike Myers in a movie (can't think of the name of the movie right now) where he was...
bhb, You always amaze me with the sadness in your words. I am sad that a 15 year old girl has such dark insight. I hope you will take a vacation...
Thank you
Yeah, 8, with over 14,000 posts. ha ha ha ha
I like this. Simple and relatable........
Holiday Shopping, for the rich T'is the season to spend money Fa la la la la, la la la la I'll buy you something precious, Honey Fa la la la...
Separate names with a comma.
