so romantic. and it flows so beautifully. very very nice. i love it.
LOVE the last line this poem has a definite ring to it. how i do love it when that happens. :)
the sky is literate today. it read me like the last line of a tragedy and sent a whisper for the clouds "come together kiss the earth with tears...
beautiful.
yes i agree. very powerful.
very nice! usually so much rhyming would clog the poem, but it only enhanced yours. the flow was excellent, and the point you made was even...
oh, have i ever been there before. feels good to write about it, huh. i especially loved the last line: "this place, here in my heart, is for...
i agree ^
yellow ran screaming from the room where i sat knees curled to my chest frowning in pensive distaste. the mirror held its ground and i counted...
i am ever so fond of you :)
you want my body, crave my soul and i want nothing. not a whisper of promise. no silent sweet comfort. no giving. i dont want to be revered. no...
dont worry about it. poetic thought tends to ebb and flow. it'll come back to you, but you cant force it.
yeah i am completely and fully on board with bhaskar's last suggestion
ooooh i like! you have a very unique style. i can recognize your stuff before i ever read your name, now. :)
the third one caught me. i am actually a bit fond of the way you broke it up...its adds poignancy to each word.
"I am a pitbull on the pantleg of opportunity" HAHAHA when i read that quote, the first thing i thought of was a dog humping someone's leg
lots of emotion in this. i must confess i related rather disturbingly to it. thanks for posting, shaba.
yeah i agree with vixen...came together so nicely at the end. and i love how you can feel/identify with the conflicting emotions of love and sex...
oh, thanks guys! it means a lot coming from you. :)
...soulshine...what a cute word!! :rolleyes:
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