There are bits of this I really liked...'moon black sea' was a phrase that jumped out at me very much!
Since you write better Than animals taste, I will Give up just for you (Oh and you had six syllables in your last line - naughty Bhaskar!)
Oh and Rafaela, is that picture of you? If it is you're very pretty; a bit like Chrissie Hynde (sp?) I know I've spelt that wrong, but she's the...
I don't like this, I don't mind some of Emily Dickinson...but as you say, it is a mediocre poem, and enough to make anyone depressed! Don't be...
I agree with browney...let's all get addicted! And I love this one...what an adorable perspective you have on everything, I wish I could keep...
I like what you are trying to say, and I like both pieces, but I am not sure which captures the overall feeling best...probably the second...
Said just right, momchild...I often cannot think of something negative to say about someone's work, and there will nearly always be an aspect of...
Keramptha, I know what you mean, I am a bit of a drama queen! Oh woe, what am I to do? *Puts hand to forehead in tragic pose* Love in a box...
Keramptha, you lost me. Hideous and disgusting in a beautiful way, I never have that feeling about something I'm sure! I would like to...
Ah, that's better. Editing, I'll have to remember that one...I'm hopeless, honestly! Well I didn't really like this one either, I'm unsure of...
Oh Trippin, you haven't met me yet have you! I LOVE constructive criticism, I could listen to other people re-working my words for hours, and...
Thank you, that's a real compliment. Is there any way for me to rectify that first line where I obviously didn't press down on the space bar?...
I wrote this is October, and recently unearthed it; the subject matter is fairly implicit, I think ;) Autumn as I walk, kicking at leaves I...
Sorry! That first line is supposed to be: 'The simple, monochrome teeth of a piano...' I'm so silly with computers!
The simple, monochrome teeth of a piano as you played, up and down we weren't afraid Of mother, standing naked in the crowd with the apple on...
That's a lot of green, Lozi!
I love the title, and the last two stanzas. It's very sad but very lovely at the same time.
I agree with everyone who has repsonded so far...I too wish that I had written this, but if I had then I would have written it differently, and...
Last stanza did it for me.
I like, but as Kitten above, I don't know.
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