This reminds me of a novel I'm currently reading, and also, to some extent, the way I feel about someone in my life. I'm not sure where...
Umm not sure what this was...bizarrely, it made me feel really hungry for cheese! Oh, and I'm happy the mouse remains unhurt by this poem :)
Something about this pulled me in...I like!
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Oh I do post, just haven't done for a while; I've not had anything I wanted to share. I'm happy you wanted to share this, though...the poetry is...
That style, so erratic in its punctuation and line breaks, could only be Devon. Even if your hadn't put your signature at the bottom of the...
I loved the bit about the ocean being all the saltier for having cried with her (the little girl). The only criticism I have is of the way you...
Maybe lazy is the wrong word...it just leaves me full of a certain calm that is easily mistaken for sleepiness. I only want to lay in bed, my...
I agree with LittleSkinny, this is atmospheric, and 'fumes of sleep' is indeed a beautiful phrase to have chosen in your work.
I love it! It's definately deeper than it would first seem, and you have really inspired me to write a poem now...the title is brilliant, too,...
Lovely as always, I liked the bit about the river giggling and the flute, this poem has made me feel really lazy now.
I love the last stanza, and the second stanza bar the last line. Those bits of the poem make it the best thing I have read lately, and one of the...
Religion is one? I agree: 'belief' is the only religion!
Oh my, I did didn't I? 'Definement': how silly! If I didn't know better I would think I was just making up words... And Sri Krishna, I...
Syntax, I understand the meaning of Bhaskar's haiku perfectly. And it meant a lot to me, not just for what it is but for what it...
I sort of agree with hippievixen, the second stanza really made me lick my lips, so sensual and lovely, mmm...
The only bit I liked in this was the bit you lifted from the Beatles. Sorry, I know that's not helpful, but I'm just not a fan (of your poem,...
Thanks for the kind words and advice, Fulmah...happy you liked it :)
No more eating meat I want to love animals and scoff chocolate! As above haiku suggests, I am leaning heavily on my love of chocolate to get me...
Oh, okay then. In that case you are forgiven. And I went into a chicken restaurant today, ordered some chicken - substitute bean thing...I...
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