The way I understood that line for myself, and I'm sure I'm way off is when you find something out that you wish you didn't know. For example when...
"to" should be "too" I don't think I like "cool violent" together, but I do like the idea of describing the shade of the sun, so maybe replace the...
Well, I would critique if I didn't like some part of it, but I can't! Some might offer a better critique but for me this shouldn't be changed.
Loved this! Holy cow. It's short but it's punchy, I don't think it needs anything more. :)
The entire piece made me smile, it has such a cynical tone throughout. [We record the terrible things we can do one another] I think you're...
[..pockets stuffed with dust he collects from forgotten volumes at the library] Mmm..that's a great image.
"little death of knowing" is a poem in itself, really struck a chord. "cold fury of the sun" is an interesting juxtaposition that resonates, I...
I love your style!! It's so fresh. And the way that first stanza flows is just breathtaking. (at least in my head) And I agree with Nick, the...
I come back and find some awesome poetry right off the bat! Thanks so much! The way you use your words is spectacular and the word choices are...
I love the title and everything about this piece, I could really feel it and connect to it. That third stanza is beautiful and inspiring.
Another great one! I'm your fan.
Wow that was brutal and honest, it gave me a jolt. I know exactly how you feel, except for the hard-on part. :)
my skin is raw and scabbed, the itch starts at the surface, but it digs on deeper until my roots and nerves are tugged and plucked. here comes...
I slipped into the bedroom, wondering where you’ve been all night. I stood in the corner by your side, breathing the sweat and the cold of our bed...
Well you mention memory and the brain..and the way the picture is on your mind and emotion being a fountain of cloudy color reminded me of the...
Haha, sorry I don't know what that means..in the final version I actually deleted that and left it as "my eyes are overripe" because I figured...
[A photograph of your dripping face Blanketed across each fissure of my brain With each emotion a fountain of cloudy color Distinct from any...
I only read the first one, my attention span is a little short right now, but I really enjoyed it. It's very smooth. I'll come back here and read...
[Sketch 1 "Can you make it in a blender?" she asks, singing a little behind those eyes. "I can make it in a coffee pot," I say, harmonizing as...
["I am - - in love with this town," he grated, rubbing his forehead, "And it's a case of Stockholm Syndrome if there ever was one."] I love this...
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