pleasure in words.
pulling muscles, out pop symbols
Words place bullets on pages
and the mind pulls the trigger found by the...
Where's the cream Filling?
Where the blood? You want to give them passion but this was luke warm, you wanna talk about hate don't start with love. Love juxtaposes hate so...
Your poem seems like something written while warming up to write. I can't understand that much of it and the flow is so choppy. Read it out loud...
I try to give my honest opinion off poems. Yours was good but alittle sticky
here what I would change. Take out words you don't need make your...
You got tone like James Earl. The poem was good but where's the Punctuation. I used to think that punctuation was the death of a poem, putting...
pressure to the yielding
that bounces back;
thighs too ravenous
she opens my ear "give it'
my cheese cake profanity
Your poem has a message but sometimes it is too wordy. I think your should take out some of the words you don't need to get the point across....
Here's the thing
Circumstance (why use this word twice, its your title) generally I’m fond
To make that one certain (lose one of these words)...
Give me my pen so I can be dead
10 ft below from lack of wet red
An though i lay in my final bed the thoughts
i discarded on confetti sacrafices...
Its like really cool right
but the poem would work well too with out the "IM"
So simple and real, I like your poetry alot. I would compare you to an unconsious magician.
The wookie so wooly
just does something to me
weather warbling for revenge
or ripping troopers limbs unhinged
he's the greates pal
That pretty much sums it up. (scarface accent ----->) Some tymes my friend ju gotda show does cock-ka-roashes how your roll.
where's the cream filling?
In the words the lengendery(<--speelcheck) Guru you got Skillz. Very moving piece very powerful. Just got to make a few critiques, the end of...
Ever see a Clint Eastwood movie? I don't care if it was Dirty Harry or the Outlaw Joney Wales, Clint didn't fuck around. He couldn't because the...
a golden bow
a frozen flow
not freezing water
making. but pausing
bodivistas in the moment
to examine their resistance
to slings and arrows...
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