The flow it great.
Today I had a little bit of inspiration and wrote a short poem on my journey with a few friends up a little mountain.
Do not trespass the sign...
Hey, I like the poem and your message is quite obvious.
But, and this may just be me, the beat of the poem is too sporadic.
What usuall works is...
It may seem as if they don't care.
In the end though the world is somewhat fair.
Harsh words may hurt for just a while,
In the end though just...
perhaps my query at the end of the poem was misconstrued?
Maybe I should have asked
"What do you think of the form of the poem? Is the rhyme...
I expected attention yes. I make no claims of being a good poet though Having less than a years expiereience dealing with the art of poetry . I...
A man's wife was murdered.
A woman's husband dies of a horrible sickness.
Someone is lost inside of a cave.
Someone is being held at gunpoint...
Now you went in the opposite direction but at least it made me smile.:)
I want criticizm yes...
But you don't have to speak it like that.
Please, If you can't show a little bit of respect do not post.
Ivory powder upon this table,
My existence has become a disgusting fable.
Being chained to this life increases my strife....
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