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Old 05-13-2004, 06:31 AM   #1
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Default Fade to black...

I never thought it would be like this
not in a million years
Never in my highest hopes
or in my darkest fears

For all my plans and expectations
of what i'd hoped to see
Disapeared in a moments time
as i simply ceased to be.


"Fade to Black" a work in progress by ronin




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Old 05-14-2004, 03:12 AM   #2
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ok, any criticism- constructive or otherwise???
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