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Old 08-14-2011, 08:05 AM   #51
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A storm is coming
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I saw one phantom sky with hazy yoke..
Of a Sun welted against ten photon strokes
Its rays striped out, ripping up big city blocks
Like a thief tearing down doors with no knocks
It was with this that I sat in Detroit city
Pissing Storms to shit bricks on this gritty

I told myself about the plight of Detroit
How it was the factories fight to exploit
This must the be the reason for its dirt
Of it's dismal hope in seasons of hurt
I marveled at the contrast, poor vs. rich
Like bomb blasts, bursting 1st in sixths
I stand near the historic Imperial tower
Its proximity is prolific, in shards of power
Several wounds clip my mental attention
My half truths bombed from a treble of tensions

Sounds of old growth built on new money
A suckling of silk with much less honey
I noticed dirty slums and golden towers
The poor carrying big lies up long hours
The rich born of yellow brick roadways
Soft gold, paving it always the old way
I spit out rage against this system
To save a world, I sit against them
That static and division are increasing
In panic, in which the rich are seizing

Broken sidewalks led to more tangled brick
Roads spun in grid lock, upsetting the sick
The garbage, in shadows below this control
In ghetto cancer cells, losing to drown souls
I warped my scarf tight, the crispy wind grows
Hiding me against the million broken windows

On one street I saw the rape of dignity
The theft of virginity in old days of infinity
Ten women walk past holding dogs, talking
I turned around and saw the dog walk barking
I speak one political song on loud speakers
Dropping in lists weak notes, musically weaker
I saw the rich laugh from high rise suites
Pointing fingers below, lying through teeth

When you're king for a day, it's cheap
You become a holiday whore for weeks
So I remembered the Sun storm coming
It was drumming to account for something
To hold a judgment in busy committees
Raining hard to shower this decrepit city

Unbelievably mind numbing
Striking an incline, its humming

Caution was a word found breathing in hell
People were veins and the streets were cells
Living city only thinking in vain...
Understand, this is fucking insane

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Old 08-18-2011, 06:21 AM   #52
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True Lies.
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My Professors say people are just dumb destitute animals
Assembled in busted up Earth: atoms issuing mandibles
Life begun they say, "In the insane primordial soup
Bing-Bang stars. . . bust ocean-nut in chemical loops
Soup spontaneously generates in an act of creation
DNA formed somehow and Satan made indoctrination"
These scholars teach to do what feels good, ignore God
Animals don't have morals, might as well kill with bombs
I raised a hand, asked if Great Grandpa was a banana ?
His face said yes. I didn't understand all this mantra,
"An Evolutionary tinker selects from random carbons
Like mercenaries of death hoeing weed from gardens"

Um, What ?

As an animal I would act, because I was one. A Lion
Of matter of fact, I obey only me, that's no lie son
I was blown away, only to be Periodic elements
science applies all things with idiotic experiments

I love Evolution

I pulled a gun out of my back pack, clicky clack
I racked the slide back, shot instantly in attack
First round plugged the professors skull back
A Misty cloud of blood said I knew the facts
I shot the teaching assistant too...execution
Wanting him to know I understand Evolution
Rest of the students simply cried, in denial ?
This is application and how to ace the Final
Taking a student by the hair, we left together
Books dropped, calling all birds of one feather

In the campus yard he escaped my control
I rip shots to halt him, scrapping his skull
OH well, this is survival of the fittest, weak fool
Probably the sickest traits leaving the gene pool
I then noticed a motorcycle approaching near
I emptied a clip into his 'adaptive' riding gear
Denting his head in, I demonstrated selection
A loss, my gain. Mutation introduced, correction

On my new motorcycle

I sped down University avenue in quick suspension
With certainty I ride trusting my public education
I saw ten thousand animals on the sidewalks
Smart primates wearing ipods, buying small talk
I pop random shots and smile at the females
Figuring they like assholes who don't feel well

I thought

Wicked lies hurt, conversed in half truths.
Of thirsting eyes converting past phone booths
This consequential terror tallies up Continental divide
Do or die, death in error or suffer to confide ?
Lips of righteousness never, ever, ever uproot
Despite in consequences against this pursuit
It's all striking sulfur to insulate match sticks
Buffering what's in you, baits past magic tricks
Altars of hate author paying on deceptive deposits
Day light saving offers Slaves barter on dejected pockets

Later,

I arrive at my parents house like a baboon
To demonstrate my attention in the class room...
The tv was on, breaking news at Michigan State
Some killer was loose, displaying incredible hate
I told them that a selective force was natural
One bullet left, maybe Darwin was not factual...
Dad stopped, what the fuck are you doing Ed ?
Mom's eyes popped, I butt the barrel to my head
Click, Pulled the trigger. my head exploded into a slimy mess
I just showed them. I was a great learner and scientist

I live Evolution.

The End.
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Old 10-27-2012, 11:46 AM   #53
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It rained last night and the garden is moist
Smells like smoke and it smells so clean
The sun is shining like a white friendly light
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Old 10-28-2012, 04:35 PM   #54
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I don't agree at all with your poem about evolution, but it was still quite entertaining and very powerfully written. Story and meaning were very carefully entwined and the dark humor and sickening action highlighted your message well.

The line ending in 'son' was a little off though..
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Old 10-28-2012, 07:15 PM   #55
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as always Duck, I really appreciate you reading and commenting. Thank you.

Son was only used to get that line to rhyme, "Lion/Lie son"...lol
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Old 10-31-2012, 05:03 AM   #56
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-Mary Anne-
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Six operated the greater plan
they all...
Picked pocketed a paper bag
In it was...
A girl hominid...behavior bad!
whom...
Gets closeted in Nature's pad
to...
Fix gossip in then lecture grads

And it goes:

It's sick this flavor is a major fad
Absent is this neighbor, Mary Anne
She is daffodils, kissing on this Handy Mann
Her bitching insists on priss, I is Peter Pan
Eyes rolling, legs split her Miss. beaver dam
She be eager and a leader of either plan
Trick-or-treat, but inhale her in a Reefer Van

This is getting out of hand,

My psyche is sirens sounding mad
Time is Gotham, time is ad-hominam
I recall a silence in a golden asylum man
On an island swollen with diamond bands
In holds of Zion, deep oceans of almond sands
Broken, corrosion, the omen keeps on going and...
Mary Anne for a moment shook then slammed
with shoulders of knowing...what our futures had.

And it was not pretty.

Love,

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Old 11-03-2012, 03:15 AM   #57
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what do you think Duck ?


Hot November

I saw the sky churning as oceans of ashes
Turning down rays of fire, fallout & flashes
Burning up the night, kissing noble November
Mixing the air with embers, opals, & splendors
Exhaled from the heaven as pyroclastic flow
To earth, blasting arrows with strong tip bows
The Most High showed, sizzling the Creation
And the people choked, shriveling like raisins
To all the wicked who took Satan's evil image:
You best believe this vision means only business
I saw this storm swallow the world's population
Airtight, noway avoiding assured demonstration

I got down on my knees, hands spread apart
Beseeching God, believing he sees only hearts
And if I am worthy, spare me not any concern
I have children, they wouldn't be ready to burn
I closed my eyes, perceiving a centurion sky
Wrapping my mind against seven billion cries

I saw,

Ten thousand angels playing Chutes & Ladders
With tools of harvest to tear truth from answers
I saw all World powers raise up skeleton armies
Behaving odd against a coming elephant tsunami
Humanity running against the Host of Heaven
Soaking up blood in the body fields of tension
I saw Napoleon in front riding with a battle flag
And Alexander in red planing amplitude in rags
Following them were one hundred million soldiers
Waging to circle a tree called Life, to mow it over

The branches were thick trunks of Lebanon cedar
At the base, a colossal end with a genuine reaper
The sky furnace above waxed hot, torching like hell
The tree went up in flames and the armies swelled
The air was a thick cloud of chromatic volcano
I blinked my eyes finally and behold the inferno!

I saw,

One hundred million necks hang from the Great Tree
Dangling in the dense wind, swaying like quaint leaves
A million silhouettes peppered the skyline like salt licks
Collecting ash and scorch, limed with motor and brick
All at once I heard the collective all cry out, gasping
A last full measure asking mercy for trespassing

A few moments later,

I looked at both my hands, lifting my head high
Giving praise to God that he let me be left alive
I spit dirt and ash out, smacking my lips in thirst
I vow to repent and to live within the scriptures
I buttoned up my coat, tonight a hot wind grows
Protecting me against the infinite day of hot coals....
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