Untitled Poem - tell me what you think:):)

[tommyboy487]

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And time comes and goes,

With a destination unknown,

Measured by itself;

Carrying with limitless strength,

All the elements

Of Fate.



For every life,

Among time’s infinite burden,

Arises a day,

Eyes wide with realization,

Where one must decide

Alone.



The priorities,

Listed deep within tampered souls,

Damaged; misarranged.

Lifestyles wronged by society,

Distorted happiness,

Dead hearts.



To bloom only once,

Without all petals open wide,

Sheltered from outside,

Is to deny light the chance to

Reveal the beauty,

Of life.



The sun will shine bright,

So let it show you a meaning,

Live life for that light:

The happiness granted to you,

When it’s not your own

At heart.



-Thomas Fox

[VanAstral]

i like the colours
and the stanza that is blue

[tommyboy487]

yeah well if the poem is bad at least the colors are nice lol(Y)

[osiris]

There is something within you, friend. Di(v)e ever deeper, and seek IT. Then bring it out into the world, and drive the cockroaches away... with your LIGHT!

[blindhobosam]

it needs a title

[tommyboy487]

you got nething?

[osiris]

it's pretty weak.
and you are a disgusting conglomeration of misapprobriated conceptions.

but what difference does it make

[couttsta]

tommy... what a brilliant mind hard to find poetry with actual connotation, not just mindless babble keep writing more they are effing awsome!