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misanthropic42o
04-07-2005, 01:02 AM
we thought she was for here to stay
but this was one awful reched day
i must tell you from the start
so hear me now, this is the very first part;
the sky was grey, a storm was a brew
and this girl still couldn't tie a shoe
she fumbled and lost,
alone in the dark
she wept and she wept
until the next day did start
and she cried soaking everything
all of her faveourite toys
until her throat started a cold
from all of the noise
she screamed and she cried
until nothing came out
she sighed and she sighed
with mediocre, and doubt
suddenly a gust of wind
it did pick up
this girls tears, had finally had enough
she floated far, into the distance
she tried and tried
but her tears were so persistant
drowning in her tears
she wept it all away
this girl drown in her tears
on an ordinary day.

browneydgrl
04-07-2005, 06:13 AM
this girl drown in her tears
on an ordinary day. how very profound

misanthropic42o
04-10-2005, 07:12 AM
why thank you :) i really appreciate it

Guff-POW
04-11-2005, 05:10 PM
coooooool

i like it

meduza
04-20-2005, 09:57 PM
very emotional i loved it:)
Keep on writing!!!!!!!

LivinNreflection
04-21-2005, 06:51 AM
I really liked it, I serioulsy alomst cried reading it. That was really good, I am amazed. Thank a lot for sharing it!

Ruby
04-26-2005, 07:25 PM
Such a beautiful poem. Thankyou for posting this, you're very talented :)