Poem.

[Syntax]

So I'll stop trying. Pretentious shit is far more popular these days anyway. So I give you.... Um.... This.

A sharp note pierced my chest
It rang inside my heart
And along with blood
It now pumps music
Which resonates
In my hollow body
She looked at my eyes
And saw beauty
It was the universe
Playing through my veins
Holding my flesh
Keeping me standing

[mysti]

that was pretty good.

[TomDijon]

i really like it, reminds me of a saul williams song; fearless

[gdhmomchild]

caught that moment well..thanks

[fulmah]

agree with all that's been said here; great poem... very effective! thanks for sharing it :)