You sound so honest in the morning

[soulrebel51]

I never post anything here, but since this was inspired by Rubin's sig and something George posted a long time ago, I thought I would :D


(keep in mind this is a song in the works, hence the rhymes)


You sound so honest in the morning
before you get to say a word
I don't believe anything you say
'cos you only tell me what your dreams heard

You look so honest when you're yawning
before you get the chance to learn
That I'm still not gonna throw my life away
just 'cos that's what you're wishing fer

I don't want to fall asleep
but you make me want to sleep outside
If I get lucky I'll be killed by falling space debris
And I'll never have to hear you cry

You sound so honest in the evening
when you're way too tired to talk
You think I really wanna sleep with yoiu
But I'd rather go take a walk

[still working out the solo]

You sound so honest in the morning
before you get to say a word
I don't believe anything you say
'cos you only tell me what your dreams heard
dreams heard
dreams heard
dreams heard
dreams heard
dreams heard...

I don't want to fall asleep
But you make me want to sleep outside
If I get lucky I'll be killed by falling space debris
And I'll never have to hear you cry



While I was writing this, the tune to "Married With Children" was stuck in my head... so it'll prolly come out sounding remotely like that. I'm still working on the chords and what not, but what do y'all think? (tell the truth... or else ;) )

[KittenX]

That last line is cliche to the max! But I really honestly truly liked the first two lines of each 'stanza' the - You look so honest - repetition and variations, those were sentimental but not in a overly sappy, sloppy way. Overall an okay song.

[soulrebel51]

cliche, eh... thanks, i'll work on that :)

[gdhmomchild]

LOL~ I got to the end and repeated the part about space debris and then it hit me, where has that senario happened before..Northen Exposure! I loved that show. Not a bad song at all, but now I have a visual of that guy getting fused with the satelite.

[soulrebel51]

huh :confused:

I have no idea what that show is... o_O


thanks :)


also...
I may change "dreams" to "ears" or just take the word out... there was something else but i dont remember :(

[BraveSirRubin]

I actually like it, and am glad that my signature inspired it :)

I would work on the ending though, it seems a tad out of place.

[soulrebel51]

yay thanks man :)

Yeah I thought so too.... I just cant think of anything else that can go there:( so I just have that there to "complete" it.


"and then you can go off and cry".. maybe?

[BraveSirRubin]

That would be better.


For some reason I feel an Oasis vibe in this song.

[soulrebel51]

:D well they are pretty much all ive been listening to for the past few months :p