First Poem

[buxillafion]

Her eyes, bright as the flames of a million suns.
Searing through me as if one of Cupid's own arrows.
Stabbing right through my heart
Leaving me crippled, disoriented, joyous...in love

please comment.

[Trotsky311]

i know what ya mean.

girl that sits next to me in my philosophy110 class.........eyes.........damn.

[has. a. boyfriend. DAMN.]

[buxillafion]

Same situation here. But not at school.

[Hippievixen]

beautiful...

'Leaving me crippled, disoriented, joyous... in love'

i love this description.

[buxillafion]

Thanks alot :)

[BrownTripleQQ]

Great Poetry!!!!

[make art not war]

"Her eyes, bright as the flames of a million suns"<<brilliant, man...it reminds me of the girl i like, man...her eyes are so fuckin pretty

[Burbot]

i toom enjoyed the unique look at the definition of love...

also the line about stabbing yer heart or whatever...good

[Dregs]

Promising. I know this is your first,but it'd be interesting to see what you could accomplish with much loinger poems though.

[buxillafion]

My second peom(wich i posted on here) is longer. But i dont think its as good.