gone

[mysti]

i used to be there but now im gone
gone like the wind,summers cool breeze,
gone like the smell of roses sucked by bee's,
gone like days you wish would never end
you took advantage of my love
you thought i would be with you through lifes every bend.
let me go
my wounds must mend
leave me alone,
you're not my friend
you lied to me every day
especially when you'd say
'i love you'
now and forever i will pray
'God, come and take me away, i dont want to see another day!'
i find the knife
so fine and thin
should i let the blade enter in?
should i toss the knife even through strife?
should i show courage and might ,
over come my fright?
why did you do this to me?
will you save me,
or let me bleed?





Hey, is this good? i have no clue, i just started to write poems & songs.

[kidder]

I like the opening lines. The sentiment, the vulnerability. Just tighten up your ideas a bit. Don't be afraid not to rhyme.