Inspired from Hamlet (Just was reading it)

[Burn]

what lies have you barraged unto my own heart,
my eyes deceive me as a ghostly nightmare,
upon which I fear will crawl from the depths of my own mind,
through the hollowed grounds and shrouded walls
within my dwelling place I do attempt to calmly rest.

and with these painted knives of
love and virtue,
my flesh penetrated in one, sweet
serenated moment of betrayal.

i beckon the blade to enter deeper,
the wound to consume me and carry me out,
this place holds me not, no soul nor spirit
of the earth can prevent me now from taking my leave.

i utter a whisper, no more a passing breathe,
to your ear alone, a secret in memory,
recall this as you will and want, this does not matter.
untrusted love, lost forever,
is not love at all, but mortal severed.

[Lozi]

bear in mind i haven't read hamlet, but want to...


i can see the obvious shakespearian inspiration that is in this, the language you've used is very similar but maybe a bit later, like Blake's era. nice romantic poem, but with death, hence the hamlet links?

[gdhmomchild]

and with these painted knives of
love and virtue,
my flesh penetrated in one, sweet
serenated moment of betrayal.

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Shakespeare fan...guilty~! I haven't read him in some years now, been taking the lazy way out watching Kenneth Brannaugh's Shakespearian movies which are excellently done (hint to any out there too lazy to endeavor reading his work, well done performances and he makes the older language more understandable to some but you still have to pay attention because of the subtleties of the language and plot).
Loved the whole poem but the second and last stanzas are my favorites. Also very enjoyable because this can be taken figuratively or literally. Thanks.

[_chris_]

Wow, I absolutely love this! I know the story of hamlet (i saw a great stage production of it) but it works even for those who dont. It truely is a fantastic poem, with fantastic imagary. It was truely compelling.