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Peregrine
02-05-2005, 03:24 AM
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would you
believe me
if I told you
my dream
we were
both flying
in the air
care free
on ivory
feathered wings
unashamed of all our skin
exposed
to the moan
of the wind
would you
believe me
if I told you
we were
making love
in the sky
from afar
we were like doves
our wings entangled
that most protractors
don’t know how to factor
would you
believe me
if I told you
how we
then fell fast asleep
in our nest
dreaming of what we do
best
our wings for blankets
covering
everything
we are not afraid
to hide
when we
make love
high
in the blue
sky
would you
believe me
if I told you
that you
made my dream
come true
?

sugarmaggie
02-05-2005, 04:38 PM
Your words are always so beautiful, just like you. :)

Peregrine
02-06-2005, 01:15 PM
thank you. you say the nicest things, babes...-mwah- :)

OneUndone
02-06-2005, 09:39 PM
Works very well...moves right along and has three distinct sections that all weave together nicely. Nice thoughts, makes one feel a nice glow inside. Thanks for posting it.

Hippievixen
02-07-2005, 03:58 AM
this is absolutely lovely... i was going to quote my favorite parts... but it is ALL good, peregrine! a man of many talents, for sure! :)

Peregrine
02-07-2005, 06:53 PM
awww...it's gr8 to be appreciated. love to u all :)

browneydgrl
02-08-2005, 05:58 AM
so beautiful. i am so glad i am in love already, or i think that poem would break my heart.

FullPower
02-08-2005, 12:21 PM
Good rythmers, hence refreshing and inspiring ~! I liked your poetry. Reminds me of Angelopoulus (Greek flim-maker)... and his willingness to share his solitude with mother nature. Love..

FP

fulmah
02-08-2005, 03:41 PM
Another excellent poem, peregrine… The first thing that stood out to me was the structure, it created a nice flow that you worked wonderfully. Your images were great as well, taking almost odd twists at just the right moment. I enjoyed this one much, thanks!