sun

[standingdeer]

Please
lift the veil of this day for me
I wish to see the sun
feel warmth upon my face as I wash my hands in a cold ocean
ravens laugh through the walls of the house
as I sit steeping tea
deepening the meaning of my sadness
with the madness of laughter

Music is my only hope
so I listen to the same song

Written words, falling water
stones become priceless
scattered through out the world
like hearts in our chests
Trying to entice motion
a sentiment of emotion

Blessings
Standingdeer

[amber]

Beautiful... kinda reminds me of how I'm feeling now~~ I love your poetry

[AshtonsMom]

I can almost feel the rhythym in this one.

[tigerlily]

ravens laugh through the walls of the house
as I sit steeping tea
deepening the meaning of my sadness
with the madness of laughter

Music is my only hope
so I listen to the same song

i really like this part... madness, craziness, depression, you give some great imagery


Trying to entice motion
a sentiment of emotion



these two lines are just a bit awkward to me.. the similarity of the words motion and emotion are difficult for me to read