Fear, and Desires....

[Icurus]

Between fears, and desires, you sought truth
in the knowledge of me, truths recieved from the
opinions of others, poor in love, poverty personified,
you choose your one chance on the wit of fools,
bliss is your gift, for you may not know the depth of your loss,
I shared my soul not surrounded by words of redundancy,
an epitaph you passed over, eagerly in search of monetary joy.
You desired only what you wanted to hear, and feared
you might actually hear me finish the truth......

Devon Knight ~

[osiris]

A desire is, after all, naught but the product of the fear of following one's right path.

eMBeMLaHV! :)

[Icurus]

Then there are they who refuse the right
path due to fear, and live their ultimate lie...life!

thanks Romi.....
Peace brother ~
Devon ~

[GirlInTheGreenGrass]

the truth: to open her eyes and mind. to look inside you, not just in herself. You're patterns didn't form together correctly. You're pattern's were much more pure. Your feelings are written beautifully.
peace& <3

[Icurus]

the truth: to open her eyes and mind. to look inside you, not just in herself. You're patterns didn't form together correctly. You're pattern's were much more pure. Your feelings are written beautifully.
peace& <3
Thank you so much Miss G.I.T.G.G.,
I'm glad I had a females input on this, I
like to know the other side, (Female), can understand what
I try and relate, and for your kind words, thank you.
Devon ~

[kidder]

I have no idea of what's going on in this thread and not much desire to find out. Have fun!

[KittenX]

Kidder :rolleyes:

I liked this line a lot, well I could relate more to it anyway
[bliss is your gift, for you may not know the depth of your loss]

I think the presentation of your ideas deters the effectiveness. You don't let each line really sink in, so the poem turns into a semi-ramble.

Oh and I also forgot, the last two lines are an excellent finish! But they need some isolation.

[deram_scholzara]

Yes, I mus agree that it is a very emotional and revealing poem. I must also agree that you could pound the lines into our brains a little better. It's amazing what hitting the return key in a few places can do. Empty space works wonders on the mind.

[Icurus]

Thanks all for the feed back, Much!
It's as I write I see it from my point of view, it's
what you've experienced thus far in life that'll allow
your mind to pick up on the obvious, and your experience
through my eye's may become clearer..

Thanks again, for your time to read, and reply.
Peace!,
Devon K. ~

[StickyPoohy]

Yeah, I hear the depth of experience there!
Beautifully seen!!


S.

[Icurus]

Yeah, I hear the depth of experience there!
Beautifully seen!!


S.
Thanks so much for that S.P., and
I feel you even have a name to go
with that experience I'm sure!
Peace,
Devon Knight ~

[OutdoorWoman]

i like this piece. i think you shouldnt change anything.
good poetry is one that invokes deep emotional meaning with the writer first and then the readers second. i know many of my pieces will obviously strike a different feeling inside of me than inside my readers. i thought this was poignant and revealing. most importantly it was a very true experience to you

[skyfire]

hey devon...this poem speaks to me...like only you can...i hope u dont think i'm ignoring u at all...been so busy, dont get much of a chance to come on here...but i'll try to keep in touch...

[Icurus]

hey devon...this poem speaks to me...like only you can...i hope u dont think i'm ignoring u at all...been so busy, dont get much of a chance to come on here...but i'll try to keep in touch...
Thank you Outdoorwoman,
Very well put, I was hoping I wasn't he only one
who thought that way, I rarely change a word
in my thoughts that I write, truly it is what it is,
99% of what I put in ink is straight from the source
within, Thank you again for your time....

SKYFIRE!!!!!!!!!!! "~ eeerrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Bout time!!! ") I was feeling alittle confused,
I actually thought someone ganked your name,
I am very happy that this is not the case, glad
you cleared that up, I've been trying through
Skip to get my name back, but I guess he don't care
bout his web site, and or the people on it, I
didn't know if you knew it was me,but you do, and
I'm smiling now, take care, and don't work to hard,
hope to hear from you soon.......
Love, and friends..
Devon Knight ~

[KarmaComa]

Devon,

This is one of my favourites from you. Of course, I haven't been around in a long time. I really like this. Good work! By the way, this is barefootanddancingdreamer. They wouldnt let me have my name back! Bastards!

[Icurus]

Devon,

This is one of my favourites from you. Of course, I haven't been around in a long time. I really like this. Good work! By the way, this is barefootanddancingdreamer. They wouldnt let me have my name back! Bastards!
Hi Barefoot,
So glad to see I'm still among some old time
friends, and thank you for your kind words,
I'm also happy that you guy's..Skyfire, and yourself
like my thought process, and how I write, it's a good
feeling to touch through writing, in a positive way,
I hope you guys are around a long time, it's nice to
pop in and see a friend, be sure and Sig your old name
at the bottom like I did, cause I wasn't able to get my
name back either, and I want to know any new names
we veterans are writing under, I'm making a note of your new name
now, talk again soon love, take care......
Devon Knight ~