overwhelming

[helen-maple]

uncovering.



water,
the heart
eyes
fingers
making
gestures
unread
confused
tension
orange
blue

i cannot relate
what i imagine
to be true

come from love
come from love.
come from love....

i falter.
i fall
in to the sadness.

somewhere
the moon
is quiet
above us.

the sun is hidden
behind clouds
the ground.

she moves me
she knows me.

i try desperately
to keep you
close
to feel you breathing
heart beating

this full ness
takes so much
this sinking feeling


thank you
for all
youve given me.

even this,
which
is overwhelming.

[LivinNreflection]

Ohh I liked that. When I was reading it, it made me go "aaaww" Good poem I liked it! Thanks for sharing it.

[GirlInTheGreenGrass]

I liked how you reffered to your feelings to orange and blue. To me it gave almost an ora presence. I liked how you gave love a description. "even this,
which is overwhelming." Great poem:)
<3

[kidder]

The middle has a wonderful cadence. The rest of it struggles to catch up.

[osiris]

Orange and Blue indeed. Quite a Proper time to be espousing such a creed. I burnt the Sun and the perfumes thereof, and there was Love.


I am gladdened in my Heart by your awe.

A whisper; a tremor. There is no difference.

eMBeMLaHV! :)

[saffronfrancisburnet]

hi there

what long days we view ,from sunrise to sunset.
the colours within all.

overwhelming life can be,with all its beauty
beauty that shines from us all.

thank you for this enlightening piece
i love the change from head to heart
your words of chosen verse.

gestures
unread
confused.


you know this journey already..........


thankyou
love npeace from saff

[helen-maple]

thanks so much for the comments,

especially saff, you always help me to understand what ive put acrossed, and understand my own words better,

love and light

[Hippievixen]

I got this drowning feeling when I read the first stanza, which was your intention, from the title of the poem. Very powerful.

[Free as a bird]

I liked its emotion yet simplicity