WAR my thoughts (poetry)

[Mr Iceman]

This was used e few nights back in the Don't be scared thread i was running, The words just came out of the blue for i write from my heart ..........
WAR
to much blood, flowing like rivers, another shot fired, another innocence lost, so much crying, for to much dieing, people filled with hate for fellow countryman, another child dies because a government lies, people shouting names, but no one replies, brother, sisters, husbands, wives, innocent people losing lives. Bleeding, pleading, crying, dieing. The truth is suppressed by government powers. When will it finish, when will it end, the heartache of loss never will mend...

[Peace-Phoenix]

I really like that man, I can feel the anger and the saddness in. Definitely very emotive, and a great beat to it too....

[Mr Iceman]

Look at it from the view of a soldier asking Why
Why do i fight anothers war
Why do i fight in anothers country
why do i fight for anthers freedom and risk my own
why do we die for another governments lies

[Spyder]

i've read this about 3 or 4 times now, and im still really bemused by it to be honest...


thats not negative...

i like it, did you adopt that style of writting to emphisis anything related to the topic you were writting about?

[Dandelion_Blood]

could i use this poem on a piece of art i am doing?


pleease please :) -full credit will ofcourse go to you i won't fob the poem off as my own

it would just go so well in the piece i am doing!

[Mr Iceman]

could i use this poem on a piece of art i am doing?


pleease please :) -full credit will ofcourse go to you i won't fob the poem off as my own

it would just go so well in the piece i am doing!
. yes you can use it. look at this from the point of view of a soldier who wants to come home . the thoughts you would have running through the streets wishing it was all over.these are my toughts from the first gulf war when i was a soldier....Don't read it as standard poetry for it is prose

[Mr Iceman]

Poetry
A piece of literature written in meter; verse.

prose
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Prose resembles a poem in some respect, as in form or sound.
A literary medium distinguished from poetry especially by its greater irregularity and variety of rhythm and its closer correspondence to the patterns of everyday speech.

Though it is readily distinguishable from poetry in that it does not treat a line as a formal unit, the significant differences between prose and poetry are of tone, pace, and sometimes subject matter.

[roxycheer]

I think that piece is fantastic! I love it...so well captured and so emotive. I love to write also...and its just so good to read other peoples writing...ur writing style is very similar to mine. So i really apreciate reading what u have writen there. Nice Job!