One

[TheLizardKingMike]

Ancient ruinlies in desert sand
Stairs, walls
Stars

Undoubted prophet, the oracle
Awaiting his newer form
Converging energy

A decending angel falls
fluttering
down

Transcending being of higher power
Granting life for but one more hour
To perfect life

"Unmoved Mover, give us a creed to believe
A path of star-light in the night
O great creator of being, I sacrifice my soul in the name of reason"
The angel had proclaimed
The winged one leaps into the wise one
A new prophet is born again

[littleskinny]

Intriguing...you sketch dark mysteries indeed. I particularly enjoyed

"Stairs, walls
Stars"

[saffronfrancisburnet]

how the picture of this piece
unfolds a energy of love for life

love npeace from saff

ps i agree little skinny

this is a intriguing poem.....

[kidder]

That opening works. You've got a mesmerizing, even hypnotic elixir here. It's alliterative and it's plump with assonance. I like that part a lot! One part to change?
"A descending angel falls/fluttering/down." It doesn't work. Here's why: If you're descending, you're already falling. Needless duplication. And if you're falling- given the nature of the word and its suggestion of weight and speed- you can't be fluttering. Your words are at cross-purposes in these lines. But that beginning! It's a gem!

[TheLizardKingMike]

That opening works. You've got a mesmerizing, even hypnotic elixir here. It's alliterative and it's plump with assonance. I like that part a lot! One part to change?
"A descending angel falls/fluttering/down." It doesn't work. Here's why: If you're descending, you're already falling. Needless duplication. And if you're falling- given the nature of the word and its suggestion of weight and speed- you can't be fluttering. Your words are at cross-purposes in these lines. But that beginning! It's a gem!I know but I just thought is sounded better.