i cannot describe

[helen-maple]

i watched thru new perceptions
as the colors bled
and faded into the space before me.
outside the colors ran but stayed perfectly in place.
keeping my mind focused i wandered everywhere.

i listen to my heart beat
the breathing
the eating.
wondering,
her words rang true?
the effect of smoking,
the thoughts
the process.
holding on to the negativity.
rigid, fierce, holding on...
desperately.

heal me, heal me,
help me
see me,
cant we share the burden
and create something new,
something beautiful?
instead of denying the truth
the essence of our living..
this dying.

i have many veins
like rivers.
my muscles.
this skin,
covers me.
kiss me and know
what lies beneath

scattered.
the mind connects.
eyes,
they cannot stop from seeing.
my thighs
hold so much tension.
relax,
into the nothingness.
we forget
how much space exists
inbetween
everything!

ahh, we are made of water.
bouyant.
fluid,
what do you think the spirit is made of?

i imagine a river
blue like green
the way the wind
sweeps atop the surface.
forceful and so gentle.
the water................

i bend over with humility
to the elements i cannot describe.
my simplicity
enables me to feel,
but to understand....
i cannot,
and therefore to expresss, is so difficult.

i love you.
without knowing you.
i cry
my eyes shut,
from not knowing how
not knowing why.

i love you.

[KittenX]

Aww....I needed to read this, so glad to have stumbled over. It's desperate, passationate and soothing all at the same time.
I think this describes my current moods about right, so kudos for sharing this. Loving and not knowing why and how...sometimes logic is evil. *sighs*

[TheLizardKingMike]

Lots of emotion. You write what you feel. The best way to do it.

[fulmah]

Great images sprinkled over quite powerful emotions, here! Your opening stanza was fantabulist, really setting the stage well. "the effect of smoking" I loved that, breaking down almost mundane acts into a kind of scientific analysis is always cool in my book.

I do think that the "heal me, help me, see me" doesn't work so well; reminds me of "tommy" too much. I think if you simply removed the "see me" that connection would be lost, to your benefit.

And this:
i bend over with humility
to the elements i cannot describe.
my simplicity
enables me to feel,
but to understand....
i cannot,
and therefore to expresss, is so difficult.
that's just wonderful. the pinnacle of the piece, imo. Thanks for sharing this, tremendous work!

[sylvanlightning]

Your poetry creates sensations on so many different levels. I enjoyed the whole work, thank you for sharing. I love you, too.

[gdhmomchild]

~*I had to read this one a few times. Just so much there. Well written and thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks~!

[novarys]

wow, very well written.
i can imagine the emotion you put into this.
good job

[helen-maple]

hey thanks alot for your thoughts and comments.
i appreciate them so much.