Paranoia's Getting Old

[TiedyeDreams]

Your words cloud my mind
like a fucking swarm of lady bugs
or locusts.

StingpoundstingPOUND;
your words against my eardrum/
in my heart.

You don't think.
You don't ever think about
anyone

YOU
you
YOU

A game of bullshit,
I'll call you on it
because that's all you ever do.




A/N: Yeah, I stole the title from a Blind Melon song. "Walk" if anyone's wondering.

[TiedyeDreams]

"Take a Look at Me Now"

I'm laying on the bathroom floor;
it's more convenient than you know

I think I lost myself between
putting the key in the door
and stumbling here

it works out fine because I just can't care anymore
and you're not here to reason with me.

There's a saxophonist playing some
fittingly depressing tune in the background

I don't even think he can read the music
but it works out fine because
I'm crying anyway.

You always said I'd die
choking on my own vomit

I argued, but I was never sure
that you weren't right

You were always a pretty
intuitive person,
I just don 't think you realized it.

Even though you're not here anymore
I think I love you just the same.

[TiedyeDreams]

"Watching You Wilt"

I had a dream
of running away
and hiding in your closet

When I woke up I
was alone
and realized that I
didn't know who you were anymore,

but I remember when you
were young and foolish
and oh so beautiful

I remember when you
smiled like you never watched
the news and
still thought cigarettes were cool,

and when you wanted to
dress up like a skeleton
and dance for the day of the dead

But your youthful curves
have narrowed
and those imperfectly perfect kinks in your amour

they've all been polished and buffered
so you can fit into
societal standards that
don't suit you in the least.

You crammed yourself
into an iron maiden
businessmen molded for you

So, I lie in bed and tell myself
I'll be here for you
because you left
before I could tell you

[TiedyeDreams]

“You Don't Know What it Means”

Peeling off skin we said
we wouldn't need anymore
was the only hobby we had that

wasn't illegal.
But still
we made the best of what we had

you said that was all
we could do and that
we should smile

just the same.
Every time I said
I love you

you said,
that's okay
it'll get better

even though it did
in time, the truth
was that I didn't

want it to.
And I still think about
what a wonderful disease

you were.

[TiedyeDreams]

“The Longest Shadows”

I just wanted to write love poems and
show you the sonnets I said
I'd never sell

Money isn't everything
was our catch
and we smiled because

we were all
we'd ever need-
broke had it's own sort

of allure
while I was holding
your hand.

[TiedyeDreams]

Just a note,
I love constructive criticism people, and it would be very much appreciated. I'm always looking to become a better writer. :D

[Vetty214]

And I still think about
what a wonderful disease

you were.

a couple of your poems have this little bonus toward the end. It's always good to have the "deepest" part of the poem toward the end.

[Vetty214]

Again, you have the ending deep and so that works well, to end with a deep/excellent thought... a zinger if you want to call it that.

you could almost combine this poem with the other one "You Don't Know What it Means"... they both seem to be along the same lines of thought/idea.


broke had it's own sort

of allure
while I was holding
your hand.

[WanderingSoul]

I love your poems.