autumnspiritplay
10-20-2008, 07:53 PM
so i've had this song called land locked blues by bright eyes stuck in my head. every time i start to write this poem the tune and rhythm come into my head. so every time i try and read it to see if i like it, thats all i can hear. what do you think? good or bad? anything i should adjust?
as our future swings over the moon
we prosper content in our rooms
its here, high away
we've tucked many a day
that we've known, that we know
that will be.
and i lie awake in your bed
you rest on my breast your sweet head.
your arms wrap around
and we snuggle on down
hum i love you,
you love me to sleep.
the stars round the moon look our way
they echo the dreams of our days.
they play on your face
as they gleam, we embrace
in these tangled up, warm huddled seas.
and as they whisper the things that they know
lo, of you, and of us to below.
your hand slow adjusts
to cup and to touch
and we slumber on through to the day.
as our future swings over the moon
we prosper content in our rooms
its here, high away
we've tucked many a day
that we've known, that we know
that will be.
and i lie awake in your bed
you rest on my breast your sweet head.
your arms wrap around
and we snuggle on down
hum i love you,
you love me to sleep.
the stars round the moon look our way
they echo the dreams of our days.
they play on your face
as they gleam, we embrace
in these tangled up, warm huddled seas.
and as they whisper the things that they know
lo, of you, and of us to below.
your hand slow adjusts
to cup and to touch
and we slumber on through to the day.