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sunshine186
10-17-2008, 06:11 AM
Is there any sanity in silence?

The river was still tonight,
And the sun set slower than ever.
We watched shady reflections float along the water
as moonlight quickly filled the air.
I saw your fears fading, though you looked to me,
wishing to touch the stars.

Gracefully we’ll slip into quiet dreams
Our breath will be taken by the sweet melody
weaving itself through the moments.

Tomorrow holds no certainty for us,
Nor does it have any for itself.
The stars are no guarantee of hope.

I can only wish to wake with an ounce of peace in mind.

*Heather*
10-17-2008, 09:07 AM
darling i think that is amazing. as i started to read it "here comes the sun" by the bealtes started playing, it was perfect.

you have great talent, i love the structure and i think it sounds compleat. keep writting, id love to see what else you have got.

sunshine186
10-18-2008, 03:10 AM
Wow, what a compliment! "Here Comes The Sun" is one of my favorite songs.

Thank you so much.

zaz
10-18-2008, 05:19 AM
Brought me to a place, a road I've been before, well written, impacts the reader keep it up.

sunshine186
10-18-2008, 09:10 PM
Thank you, dear.

The Instinct
10-25-2008, 11:37 AM
hey sun I didn't know you wrote! I liked it :)