i thought you were on my side

[rastas edible]

i thought you were on my side in this
fixed game of days
my girl for good and worse times spent
at least together,
or drunk and collapsing
or naked and spiteful in the slick neon of
a Parkdale night

but there are no boundaries on this trust of
fate...only tossed coins in supermall wishing wells...only small splashes and wrong endings

only broken words over a broken phone line because i was so far away that the syllables couldn't make the stretch...and your accent
became a sudden weapon
registered on my voicemail...
boom boom and a flatline

[Nick Scratch]

you nailed it, edible. 'naked and spiteful in the slick neon' that is a beautiful flow. and that ending 'boom boom and flatline'. you've gotten better with age, mon frere.

[KittenX]

I love your style!! It's so fresh. And the way that first stanza flows is just breathtaking. (at least in my head) And I agree with Nick, the ending was explosive (heh)