A LOT of Haikus....

[Amaya]

I write haikus in my sparetime (in French class), can you tell me if they are any good? I want to now if they are good enough to keep writing them...

Nearby a bird sings
All of the world seems alive
Nature welcomes spring.


A song in the air
Take me to another time
When the world was young

Your laughter like chimes
Seemed to make the world brighter
Smile for us again

Longing for your light
We wait silently in hell
Save us from our pit

[Amaya]

The Great War rages
In chaos I find silence
A dream in a dream

Your smile like spring
My winter heart seems to melt
You brighten my world
With you, I can be happy
My heart blooms again

[Amaya]

The tears in your eyes
they fall to the ground silver
The fallen angel

[Vetty214]

these are nice! you did a great job... look up "haiku" in Wikepedia and it will tell you that sometimes we have to shorten our version (5-7-5) to something with less syllables (10 to 14 total vs. the 17 of 5-7-5) because the Japanese language doesn't have as many stresses. So your work is excellent, but play with something shorter and see if you like it... This was my favorite and really works with the 5-7-5 format:

The Great War rages
In chaos I find silence
A dream in a dream

[Bhaskar]

Some were great, but some had too many cliches or weak lines:

Your smile like spring
My winter heart seems to melt
You brighten my world
With you, I can be happy
My heart blooms again


I really liked the first few, though you could have more punch in that final line.

[sethm13]

Yeah. I really like them, even if I've never really completely understood Haiku