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she88
02-08-2008, 05:53 AM
I think in this world where we are addicted to shame

Its so much easier to move on than blame

ANYONE

Especially ourselves

And while the nights are passing

The days are masking

This emptiness we feel inside

And the regret

We can no longer

HIDE

from our most important ties

redyelruc
02-14-2008, 08:02 PM
Good stuff. Simple and to the point.

The Instinct
03-04-2008, 09:19 PM
I agree with Redyelruc. Short, simple, to the point, and when it's done right, it's done good, and that you did with this one.

Jon Butcher
03-06-2008, 02:32 PM
not a fan of rhyming poems, but this worked for me. Loved the lay out of it too,
it just leaps from the page.