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Jack Maundrell
11-08-2007, 05:02 PM
A blur of wind blows by thats not warm nor cold
but strong enough to graze your soul.
And memories that shall keep the test of time
for people unwilling to change their mind.
To a world turning at will and yet I'm standing still
observing the truth that my life may fulfill.
Destined for seclusion and all the while
my journey I came to love & yet vile.

skyfire
11-08-2007, 08:12 PM
the first four lines are my favorite, they are the strongest, i think...

Jack Maundrell
11-10-2007, 07:14 AM
I think so too

poopzilla33
11-11-2007, 05:39 AM
in the first line try making it neither warm nor cold

Jack Maundrell
11-11-2007, 05:39 PM
I was debating on 'nor' when I wrote it