To Hippie Wierdos Everywere

[groovecookie]

To Hippie "Weirdo's" Everywhere


The universe sings....
it's your soul.
the cars on the street
watch them roll.

wheels they're turning
flashing eyes burning
everyone's learning to drive
for as long as they're alive.

live in your mind
and you'll only find
you live in an attic...
repetition and static

live in the now
you already know how
just like you did
when you were a kid

now listen to me
cause I want you to see
how because you are here
I am free

When I think of you
all I can do
Is think "That's who I am"
and then I can jam

Of course, everyone's me,
but I like to see
myself as the ones that I love

It makes me shine
It makes me sing
like the stars of your soul all above

brothers and sisters, peace
restlesss worries ceace
this poem's a magical charm
to bless and protect you from harm

[heywood floyd]

Actually, in a really odd and dorky way, this is kind of endearing. I guess because it seems very unassuming and hopelessly extroverted, like something from the acid casualty who didn't end up thinking that he was an orange and everyone wanted to peel him. It reminds me of an awkward rhyme this beggar came up to me with one night, and that was pretty charming too... I gave him a few bucks no problem.

And I'm glad you didn't say it's a good idea to live inside your mind-- because it isn't. For once, someone isn't saying 'look within'!!! And the ending kind of sealed the deal-- it's like one of those Fantasy/Quest-type video game chants or something, except it's for homeless people trying to survive on the crazy streets... and I mean that in a good way.

[groovecookie]

Actually, in a really odd and dorky way, this is kind of endearing. I guess because it seems very unassuming and hopelessly extroverted, like something from the acid casualty who didn't end up thinking that he was an orange and everyone wanted to peel him. It reminds me of an awkward rhyme this beggar came up to me with one night, and that was pretty charming too... I gave him a few bucks no problem.

And I'm glad you didn't say it's a good idea to live inside your mind-- because it isn't. For once, someone isn't saying 'look within'!!! And the ending kind of sealed the deal-- it's like one of those Fantasy/Quest-type video game chants or something, except it's for homeless people trying to survive on the crazy streets... and I mean that in a good way.lol I'm not afraid to say it...it's crap. Not really sure why I posted it...got other ones l like better, but this one was about hippies. It kind of makes me a little sick to read it,though.
I honestly don't know what I was thinking when I wrote it or when I posted it. aaaughhttp://www.hipforums.com/forums/images/newsmilies/puke.gif

[skyfire]

^sometimes we dont think when we're writing, i do it often and finish off with a big X! writing things that maybe arent very substantial is how we learn to recognize fluff and instead write things that are concrete...so keep writing, no matter if it's "crap" or not...it still flows well!

[jahmerimaka]

i enjoyed it

[dirty_boots]

Yeah I liked it too, I like your attitude ! Well at least I think I do, but I might have been looking at it all wrong ?! Anyway blah blah blah, well done :) !!

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