Broken Child

[nynysuts]

Behind a smiling face there sometimes lies
A broken child, hiding her eyes
The world poiltely forgets to ask
So she lives behind a smiling mask

The broken child has a fitful sleep
Her thoughts from slumber do they keep
If only they could know the truth
Then maybe she could keep her youth

He turns to her with evil eyes
Broken child looks, Broken child cries
He takes his pleasure, gives her pain
Broken child is never the same again

she wakes and looks at where she lies
Broken child rubs her eyes
Stands blinking in the morning light
The end of an unthinkable night

[Malapascua]

Sad, true, powerful..............
Far to much of this kind of thing going on in the world.
Nice work.

[Justagrrl420]

beautiful, simple and powerful..keep writing..

[redyelruc]

Very sad. I have tears in my eyes. Good writing.

Peace,
A.

[nynysuts]

Thanks for your comments!

[Vetty214]

This is a very great poem.... have you tried to change it to first person? It may make it even more powerful... here is an example below of a couple of your stanzas...

Behind my smiling face there lies
A broken child, hiding eyes
The world politely forgets to ask
I live behind a smiling mask...

and the third stanza...

He turns to me with evil eyes
Broken child looks, Broken child cries
He takes his pleasure, gives me pain
Broken child is never the same

Keep up the good work! Nice! Vetty

[blackheartbitch]

^ i agree try it in the first person. but its a good read either way.

[nynysuts]

I don't know, I quite like the third person way because it shows how noone can get through to the child.

[Autentique]

it's so sad :(
I think in the third person is perfect because it feels like a state of denial and depersonalization.
I almost cry too.