midnight wandering

[shobs]

the canopy is thick
devouring the energy of nights endevours
rendering pathways endless until morn
the trees stepped quietly into the lake
the man lays hidden behind the moon, smiling
all that dwell in that old sweetened forest
awake

[shobs]

i was fucking TRIPPING in the boundary waters canoe area wen i wrote this btw

[MagnanimityMan]

i like it, i really like it

[shobs]

thx dude, all criticisms are welcome!

[Vetty214]

I appreciate this one, trip away if that's what it takes to get this good. I especially like "devouring" and "endeavors" in the same line and "rendering" and "endless" together in the same line. You definitely have music playing in your head with this one. Thanks for sharing, Vetty214

[KittenX]

Short, visual, and easy to connect to, no extra fluff is a plus.

[elayne]

Good job! It flows pleasantly.