working on it

[06thenewsummeroflove]

i recently started the first poem i have written in a while im not done with it but im a bit rusty and would like some feedback

Technicly speaking im something like a heathen
but im ride or die for whatever io believe in
climbed on this soapbox now i've started preachin
cause the elements got me thinkin bout the reasons
why i do my dirt and and why i stay so grimey
and if i'm in the right why aint nobody behind me
i need someone beside me but loves a dirty word
spelled four letters classified noun or verb
ya see im pushing off maturity like superman to kriptonite
im battling adulthood but its a vain and pointless fight
fairly levelheaded but i still cant see wrong from right....

[AddictiveSmile]

I think it's a great start. Can't wait to read it when it's finished. I had stopped writing for a few years and now just getting back into the swing of things. Once you start up again you'll get the juice flowing and won't be able to stop! Keep writing man! -Cassi

[sunshine_daydream07]

very good, i really like it!

keep goin' with it, cant wait to read the rest :]

[hoperenefeese]

Technicly speaking im something like a heathen
but im ride or die for whatever io believe in
climbed on this soapbox now i've started preachin
cause the elements got me thinkin bout the reasons
why i do my dirt and and why i stay so grimey
and if i'm in the right why aint nobody behind me
i need someone beside me but loves a dirty word
spelled four letters classified noun or verb
ya see im pushing off maturity like superman to kriptonite
im battling adulthood but its a vain and pointless fight
fairly levelheaded but i still cant see wrong from right....

old enough to know better , but to young to see the light
living within myself, maturity , the never ending fight!
Never ending story, with no happy ending
word's and feeling's build up, yet i keep on defending



If you would like to keep these couple line's as your own, that is fine with me
i love helping people....enjoy! Keep up the good work!

[The Instinct]

great start.