8 miles down the road.

[schmokes]

8 miles down the road

sweaty feet.
aching back and aching thighs;
still you're something
awful sweet.

panting and running,
we're step for step.
and yet.
you seem too far to get.
a Canada to my Tibet.

right beside you.
you know, i know,
that sound on the ground,
the concrete knows.
i'm right for you.

8 miles later,
and 80 minutes farther,
i can see us running.
we're running,
and it's stunning,
but i can see us still,
miles from where we met,
still we're running step for step.


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i'm not one for rhyming poems, and i wrote it in about 15 minutes, but i felt too strongly about it to edit it first. hope its good.

[Ava Adore]

id give it three thiumbs up but i dont know how to make the thing do three thumbs up i think its gonna only do one but oh well youll know what i meant. later gator

danny-elle

[KittenX]

I likey.

panting and running,
we're step for step.
and yet.
you seem too far to get.
a Canada to my Tibet.

Woooo!! That's purfect.

[fulmah]

I like this too... nice little running flow you got here. If I was forced to offer up any criticism tho, I think the "stunning" line is a little forced.... but overall this was a cool little piece

[schmokes]

thanks guys

Woooo!! That's purfect.
haha, that with your sn made me laugh.

i didn't like the 'stunning' line at first either fumah, it sounded too dr.suess, but it sort of grew on me