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Moving_cloud
08-12-2004, 01:07 PM
With empty hands i stand
and tears in my eyes
not sure who i have been

Rain, wind and moons rising
the gold of the morning sun
the coyote's song in a dream

In a time far from here
when you sleep under leaves not yet fallen
let me gently touch you again

With all i am

TrippinBTM
08-12-2004, 04:36 PM
Beautiful. Nice work.

KittenX
08-12-2004, 05:21 PM
The opening didn't really touch me...
Yet the rest I liked...
the gold of the morning sun
the coyote's song in a dream

Good imagery in that line!

sylvanlightning
08-12-2004, 10:22 PM
With empty hands i stand
and tears in my eyes
not sure who i have been

Rain, wind and moons rising
the gold of the morning sun
the coyote's song in a dream

In a time far from here
when you sleep under leaves not yet fallen
let me gently touch you again

With all i am

This is beautiful... I love your tree imagery.

Leaves falling,
allowing my roots
to digest
what you have been.

...sometimes the wind
causes us to touch.