DopeSickKid's Poetry

[sylvanlightning]

I've read this recent work.

[DazedDreamer]

i liked them all but the first one maybe you should try to use another word besides fuck but thats just my opinon but other then that there all great!

[Razor Face]

I Can't Be Perfect, So Fuckoff, And Die

I can't be perfect, no one can.
If you try to reach out, and save me I will bite off your fucking hand.
Leave me alone, I'm better off on my own.
Besides walking alone is all I have ever known.
Take your lectures, and shove them up your ass.
I have already forgotten you, ya your a thing of the past.
I have never loved you.
I don't know what love is anymore.
Your just a shadow, just another fuck to ignore.
Don't bother me with your bullshit, its just another lie.
I Can't Be Perfect, So Fuckoff, And Die.

Jesus! If you take this kind of honesty, and keep putting it out there, and hopefully, get past adolecence, you're gonna be a great fucking poet. I mean it. I imagine this is what a thousand kids have been thinking when they've spoken with me, but I've yet to hear it so powerfully.

[inbloom]

fuck off and die is my favourite one of the lot. powerful shit, dude. keep it up, don't ever stop tapping into that energy.

[sylvanlightning]

Rock on. Love your poetry and your solid posts.
My regards to you my brother.

~*

[Simulato]

That is really powerful stuff. Keep writing, you have a lot of talent.

[jailmate]

Start govin your hair instead,
vuk tryin to verbalize duh enigmah,
what iz realer iz your sanity,
an duh feel uv dreads weighin
back your head level with duh Horizon.

gove up and grow out HAIR

[guardian_tnaos]

Start govin your hair instead,
vuk tryin to verbalize duh enigmah,
what iz realer iz your sanity,
an duh feel uv dreads weighin
back your head level with duh Horizon.

gove up and grow out HAIR

dude, are you foreign? you should work on that english and grammar before you try to insult someone....just my opinion.

[nitemarehippygirl]

hahaha..... oh man, i agree completely. i'm sure he's a half-witted 10 year old with nothing to do but write nonsense. you should check out some of his other posts to really go bonkers. i can't stand idiocy.

[roly]

what did the world do to you?

[roygbivp]

lots of attitude man...and lots of beautiful poetry...
sometimes feelings like that just make you go insane man
rock on
keep on truckin

[sylvanlightning]

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[kidder]

Gawd, some of this stuff is awful. You're never going to go anywhere listening to people who know squat about the basic demands of pen and paper. Time for you to stop writing and do some reading. Respect the craft and do your homework.

[kidder]

Blackie, a noble defence! Kudos to you. Hey, I've read 'Howl' and even now all these years later it still has humpf. Not bad for a beat poet. Let the Dopedsickkid do his thing. I'll pass on it and come back when he's made the big time.

[Joseph0]

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[KittenX]

Hey what's that word....ohh I know, opinion!

[kidder]

JosephO- the demands of pen and paper- that the two be conjoined in a simple marriage of effect and clarity. Poetry is, if anything, the clearest, cleanest expression of human experience. It's not prose or any imitation of it. It's not overstatement, verbal embroidery or lecture. It's the ultimate form of writing- if it's done well. Okay, suggestions for DSK- get rid of those adjectives. They pollute a poem's lines. Shorten each scan. And pay attention to how the piece flows. Poetry should be a celebration of the human voice and fall easily off the page. It's not hard to do, even for young poets, but they must be praised for meeting their goals. Hmmmm, what are his goals?

Blackie, you've got your head screwed on right. And that's a tough thing for anyone to do these days!

[hiphiphippy999]

Dude you fucking rule! Seriously that is some pretty powerful shit man.Thats like the mindfuck of all times man. I'm a poet too, but I havent got around to sharing it to anyone yet. But all I can say to you is man keep releasing that attitude, angst and just passion man. Thats what i like about your poetry, very passionate keep it up, peace brother.

[KittenX]

Now isn't -that- a mature way to respond to someone you disagree with....

Better yet, do you care what he thinks? Didn't think so. Then why react so violently to someone you don't know say something you don't care about? Hm? :H

[KittenX]

My Poems Mean Alot To Me More Then You Could Possibly Understand. Im Never Posting Another Poem On This Forum Again.
To -most- people who write poetry, their -craft- if they consider it as such means a lot. ~Most~ poets are a touchy folk and you've just become a prime example of that. But at the same time you have to consider your own rational...if you're posting here, you're exposing the most private, personal expect of yourself. Obviously you want to receive compliments (dont we all?) but you -have- to recognize that not EVERYONE thinks the same, feels the same, believes in the same things, and on a public message board you must expect that diversity of responses.
I see that you've only got -one- negative response which I personally think you either should have simply taken with a grain of salt, disregarded entirely or tried to -understand- why that person responded the way he did.

My point here is that on a -Public- message board, to assume that everyone will love and praise you is just a bit presumptious don't you think? And if you can't take a little bit of "heat" from just ONE person than maybe you really shouldn't expose yourself to this environment where you are bound at some point get a response that YOU personally won't like.

I wish you luck in your poetic expressions, but hope that you will reconsider your approach to this medium of communication. Continue to post as you obviously have a lot of people to appreciate your work and like it for what it is, as for those who don't, keep in mind that you're in control here and what they're stating is only an -opinion- not a fact.

[sylvanlightning]

I would start a new thread... just my opinion... be like burning sage and clearing all the conflict.

[sylvanlightning]

Sure. You can tell the intent by the message.

[KittenX]

Because That Does Not Help Me. It Just Makes Me Feel ShittyI understand, I'm just saying, try not to let it get to ya, that's all. Let him say whatever he wants, thats his right.

So just shrug it off and pay no mind if it bothers you so. :sunglasse

[kidder]

I haven't checked here in awhile. Hmmmmmmmmm, looks like somebody is having a pisser of a day! Dopesick, I write a lot and will post here. When I want to. This isn't the only board on the net. I'm especially good at parodies and that would really screw up your head. In the meantime, continue to write for those who like your material. I don't. And why that bothers you so much I haven't the faintest little squinched up, squirrely idea. Deal with it. Ignore the voices you disagree with. But at least first consider what they have to say.

[sylvanlightning]

memories of an old conversation.

[kidder]

Sylvanlighting, let me get your message straight. If a reader comes to these forums he or she must come to flatter or worship. Treat each poem like a religious experience. Amazing, isn't it. Well, I've never sat in a pew nor do I intend to and I'm surprised anyone who enjoys or celebrates verse ever would. The world's too big a place to live it in a closet and actually believe you're alive.

[sylvanlightning]

I'm a guest. Constructive and creative are always welcome.
The world is alive with beauty. All is one, alone is that which disconnects itself from the whole.

[thrawn]

you curse alot man

[kidder]

Brandon, hope you got that last one. Yr one lucky dude!

[TheLittleOne]

aww that's sweeet

[thrawn]

i dont want to annoy ppl by saying this, but i think the poetrys popularity is based off the "shock value" that encompasses his swearing. How much heat wil i get for this. I wonder.






in your picture you dont look stoned you look tired.

[ashleanicole420]

I love your poetry. i write stuff too, and surprisingly, your stuff is alot like mine. i enjoyed reading it. but wow...you're only 13! i cant believe it. well actually i guess i can because ive lived the same kind of life. its been a little better lately for me, im really beginning to come into tune with myself and the world around. idk, i still think about that shit though, its still me. whatever man, keep on writing and send me a post if ya can.

[ElChivato]

'no smile', 'soon', and 'your blue eyes are turning grey' are my favourites. they're really good. ur a really good writer, dope.
peace

[inbloom]

hey man, i haven't seen you around in awhile. where you been? :D

[Raving Sultan]

ahh damn, this bitch is back... are you still being butt raped by a heroin addicted gay dude?

[Raving Sultan]

lol!

[nitemarehippygirl]

ahh damn, this bitch is back... are you still being butt raped by a heroin addicted gay dude?dude... sorry, but that was uncalled-for. he's only 13.


sophia.

[m6m]

DSKid,


You have a strong voice, and your connected to your emotions.
Two things they can't teach in school.

When I read poetry, or even when I hear words spoken, I don't always hear the sense of the words.

I'll hear the tones of the sylables as they climb and cascade, slip and grab-hold.
Note to note I catch the meaning in the feel.

There's this cat I met who played his poetry like word-music.
He picked words for the tone combinations of their sylables.

Put a verse together similar to a bar of music.
With the verses woven into a song.

That was then, now he forces his words to make sense, but they're still music.

[thrawn]

You sound pretty dramatic. Like my younger sister.

[Nathan11]

Hey DSK, I really like a lot of you work.
We haven't talked in a LONG time.
Sorry about that.
I just wanted to tell you, keep on writing.

And Raving Sultan, you're FUCKING SICK!

[Spyder]

on the whole i like it all, but if i could offer one bit of advice is not to mass produce...and really refine the poems you have, no matter how old they are, keep working on them untill you cant do anything more...

also try writting about a variety of thigns, even if they dont work out completely, be it a washing machine or something crazy, but just try and write about as much as you can, it'll really benefit your serious writting

oh and read! read read read read everything you can, assimilate knowladge...

ok thats 3 bits of advice but stil! poetry is evolution afterall

keep up with the good work

[thrawn]

All your poems sound the same.

[thrawn]

You Know Dude Fuck You You Stupid Fag Fucking Piece Of Fuck. Like I give a fuck what you think you fucking pedophile bitch ass fuck mouth cum slurping whore FUCK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Wow, you really are thirteen.

[crummyrummy]

I knew your were gay!!! thats cool.....

[thrawn]

Hah, just what I think. All Im saying is he really is thirteen.

[MoonjavaSeed]

my god i really enjoyed that, dopesickkid. hahaha :eek:

[mistkgarden922]

All your work is great! I wish I had found and outlet for all my pain when I was 13, I just used alot of drugs and cried myself to sleep (if I could sleep), When I found writting was a way to let out my emotions I felt freed from the pain as I wrote, I can feel that freedom in your work. Let it out and someday you'll make it to a fucked up 26 like me but let me tell you a little secret: as you let out the pain the idea for death being grand doesnt exsist anymore and that baby thats what its all about Keep writting, we need your kind of honesty to keep us grounded

[thrawn]

Hes a stupid emo bitch.

[Orsino2]

lovely...

[purcolekraze]

sounds like you have alot to say...maybe you need someone to talk to, have you considered counseling?

[joker]

You sure as hell have picked the perfect age to start writing poetry. Keep it up you might be famous some day. Right on man!

[gdhmomchild]

Forever You Will Be.
Forever In My Apathy.
Your In My Rearview Mirror.
As I See Things Cleaer.
Im Somthing You Will Never Be.
Happy.
_______________

Really liked this last part. ty~*

[Candle]

don't ever stop tapping into that energy.
^Words to live by.

A.M.A.Z.I.N.G. poetry!

[Nathan11]

Now you see here?
That's good.
And it's happy.
And what is this? Do I sense some LOVE?!
:D
Good job, bro.

[BlackGuardXIII]

To all who've been truly, unduly, and cruelly afflicted..
Who must now adjust to their trust being busted.
Whose drive to survive kept alive, though convicted.
Who flee, and steal meals, to be free of who lusted.

On the bittersweet street, they meet with deceit.
Get smart, with scarred, torn apart hearts in retreat.
Mistreated, do what's needed so to see no repeat.
Incomplete, feeling cheated they're beat by the heat.

Who long to belong, you were done wrong all along .
The swan song is that you get strong as King Kong.
Aware of the nightmare, you're too scared to care.
You dare to repair the glaring despair.
Okay that is all for now.

[Nathan11]

Yeah, that was far-out, man.

[BlackGuardXIII]

I am not totally happy with it and will do some clean up at some point.
I just felt like writing it cuz I was inspired by you. All the things you have already learned at such a young age.... it is a real benefit for your future, and an advantage that will be valuable in the workplace. Unfortunately, nearly all the people I know who were so savvy so young had to pay quite a heavy price for it.
"The best steel comes from the hottest fire."
"No rain makes a desert."
"You can't teach experience, which gives you good judgement. So how do you get experience? Bad judgement."
"In theory there is no difference between practice and theory, but in practice there is."

I don't know if any of those quotes are meaningful to you, but I have always liked them. Oh ya, one more.
"You never need to explain yourself, cuz your friends don't need an explanation, and your enemies won't believe you anyway. If your friends don't mind, your enemies don't matter."

[Jack_Straw2208]

My Poems Mean Alot To Me More Then You Could Possibly Understand. Im Never Posting Another Poem On This Forum Again.
thank you VERY much.

[BlackGuardXIII]

One thing that I feel, but I might be way off base, it is just my conclusion from years of observing and interacting with everyone I meet. First, poets seem to learn how to show their feelings in a clear and precise way that makes it easy for others to know exactly how they truly feel inside, which I think lets them know right away if they relate to the poet's personality or not, cuz there is no pretense or deception in most poetry.
The other thing that is maybe gonna raise some eyebrows is that I have found that the friends I have met who write the poems that are the most honest, the most heartfelt, the most 'straight up', and that do not hide anything.... these are more often people who had a rough ride growing up, have very little in the way of financial security, and have a very limited education. One of my best friends, who writes awesome, to me, poetry, has claimed to have about a grade three education, which I don't find hard to believe. Can't spell, and is always ready to use a string of profanity to make a point, and never lies about feelings. Lays it all out, what you see is what you get. And some of the worst poetry, imho, is by university grads, who are educated, but not emotionally intelligent, imho.
I better not say anymore. Sorry if any one who reads this is offended, it is just my personal observation from my life's relationships, and what I have read. The best singers are the same. All my favourite singers came from the wrong side of town.

[Jack_Straw2208]

Im just another furture suicide
I was born to lose.
Take your hatefull mind
just dig my grave if it satisfies you.
I dont have a future
I don't have a soal anymore.
There is no love left inside of me.
To you Im just a broke down junkie whore.
Right now I have a gun to my head.
I wanna pull the trigger, but Im to much of a coward.
As if anyone cared anyway.
No one would miss me.
There is nothing I can offer.
To earn someones love.
No one needs me here.
To my mom Im just a useless pansey
Just a immoral queer.
My inside is empyty.
My existance is meaningless.
I never hated anyone except for myself.
I hate myself for being broken.
For being so useless.
My life isn't worth living.
My life isn't worth a dime.
No one will ever love me.
For the piece of shit I am inside.
Take your hatred out on me.
Thats all Im good for.
I will see you all in hell.
I hate everyone.
I always will.

If you dont like it then dont reply to it. no, that quite all right... you said you wouldnt post another poem again?

am i the only one who notices that his poems usually follow the same theme?

also, you say that you're a peice of shit in that poem... whenever anyone agrees with that, you flip out on them. you claim to "not care" and stuff, but whenever anyone pisses you off, you have to spend 2 or 3 minutes of your life to try and bring them down, with poorly written, profanity riddled comebacks... *coughHYPOCRATE(sp)ATTENTIONWHOREcough*

[BlackGuardXIII]

I know I posted this before, but it seemed appropriate to post it again, please excuse the occasional swear word in it.

FiretrUCK
.
It's the fuckin' shits, so fuck it! It really is fuck all.
Fuckin' right! You are as sharp as a fuckin' ball.
Hey Fuckhead! Smarten the fuck up! Get fuckin' real.
Right fuckin' now! What in hell's your fuckin' deal?
.

Fuckin' A! No fuckin' way! I'm gonna fuckin' slay!
What the fuck? Unfuckinreal! Take your fuckin' shot.
We're fuckin' fucked! Oh fuck yeah, ya stupid fuck!
Go fuck yourself! No way, fuck you! Like I give a fuck.
.

If you don't fuckin' mind, then I don't fuckin' care.
You're a fuckin' jerk! You wouldn't fuckin' dare.
Next time you fuck me, just fuckin' kiss me first.
Holy fuck! Don't say fuck! It's the fuckin' worst.
.

Fuckin' goof! It's all fucked up! What the fuck is that?
You fucked the dog. Where's your fuckin' brain at?
You lucky fuck! How the fuck are you still alive?
You had nine fuckin' lives and so far fucked up five.
.

Beats the fuck out of me how you fuckin' survive?
Take some fuckin' care next time you fuckin' drive.
Fuck up again...you'll take a fuckin' dive.
For fuck's sake! Fuck off before the heat arrive.
.

Cuz fuckin' sticks and fuckin' stones.
Can fuckin' break your fuckin' bones.
But Fuckin' names will never fuckin' hurt me.
Fuck! You fucked with it again. It don't fuckin' matter.
.


BlackGuardXIII
2:00 PM, June 15th, 1991

[BlackGuardXIII]

I find it interesting that so many adults get so wound up over a word. Its a word, for fuck sake. I got kicked off a msn group cuz one of the managers didn't like me using a swear word. Of course, his threads were full of stuff like " Oh, that bitch, I killed her and roasted her on a spit..." and other lovely things along that line. He was offended by the word cunt, but not by joking about murdering women..... and I called him on it, and the fucking cunt booted me out.
I have found that that word is the 'real' bad word. Only real degenerates like me dare to use it it seems.

[gdhmomchild]

~*LoL*~
Silly fucktards!! (j/k)

Hey Jack_Straw2208, people are allowed to change their minds and 'sides, you are very, very rarely here in this forum so it shouldn't affect your day one way or another. I usually avoid/ignore threads or posts by people that annoy me, it doesn't always but usually works. Sorry if y'all have had run ins in other forums or threads.

[BlackGuardXIII]

I could see someone thinking that you were being insulting to him... And no matter how unintentional it is, sometimes words can be taken more than one way, and Jack could very well misinterpret certain phrases, like, "go fucking kill yourself." see what I mean? Some people might find that offensive, or even threatening, and certain fucktards ( had to use it, that made me laugh), will even charge you, well not you, your a minor, but they'd charge me. I know, it sounds hard to believe, but hey, lots of stuff is. I knew two girls who liked to call each other by the cutesy nicname 'puss cunt'. It was hilarious to them, and I got used to it, but at first I was actually quite stunned.... okay I am always stunned, but you know what I mean.

[gdhmomchild]

...theres a cure fer that, quit sitting on the stun gun! Yeah, cunt is one of those words where you better be great friends to use it.

[BlackGuardXIII]

I'd say it is the most feared sexual swear word, and only a couple of ethnic slurs have the potential to be considered as universally offensive, but imho, even the worst ethnic slurs, as hateful and disgusting as they are, are not as widely offensive as the c word.
What do you think? Are the two or three worst ethnic slurs more universally taboo? Is there a homophobic swear that is more offensive? I have felt that the c word is number one for a couple years, and am curious what you all think.

[Hippievixen]

the word cunt is a very insensitive word to say to a chick. I know that
'cunt' doesn't bother me.

i love your stuff, dopesickkid.

you're fukken brilliant! :)

[BlackGuardXIII]

the word cunt is a very insensitive word to say to a chick. I know thatYeah, most times it is, but my fiance doesn't bat an eye at it, and then other women are extremely offended by far lesser swears. Guys too, one guy I worked with apologized to me when he said the word 'crap'. He was embarrassed that he was so 'out of control' lol

[BlackGuardXIII]

'cunt' doesn't bother me.

i love your stuff, dopesickkid.

you're fukken brilliant! :)
A rose by any name smells just as sweet... and I love roses....wink wink.

[Jack_Straw2208]

*cough*notalentloser*cough*gorightyouownshit*Cough b4youstarttalkinboutmine*cough*fuckface*cough:)

if you think its easy to write then go the fuck ahead and give it a shot asshole right here and now in this thread. if you think your better then me then post fuckhead, but i know im better and smarter then you will ever be fucker, so bring on yur talent asshole i bet you dont have a speck of talent in your body, thats why you got to try and bring everyone down cuz your a fucking loser.
i know its not easy to write, im into making music though, thats where i put my talent. and its not the greatest music, but i dont take it so seriously. we all have skills and whatnot, im just not into making poetry.
and i doubt "better" and "smarter"... look at you. repetative poems about how much life sucks and how hateful everything is. you bitch at me about trying to bring you down so much, but not a sentance before that, you say that i "dont have a speck of talent", and also, i guess you told me that i should go kill myself... also, the only weight your replies carry is the constant use of the word fuck... yeah, much "better" and "smarter".

i'll post my shit, if you guys knock it, then cool, i know im not that great, but atleast my stuff doesnt sound the same, and isnt all about pretty much the same thing.

www.myspace.com/theonekurkass

check it out, or not whatever.

[interval_illusion]

this makes me wanna find the poems i wrote when i was young, i mean.. um younger.....


and post them.

ill find em and post them in this thread. maybe then ds, youll understand some times i dont say

[krazy_4_mike]

:cool: that was so good i love the poetry

[velvet]

Dopesick.. just love you dude *hug*

[Spyder]

i just fear its all getting a bit repetative, im not saying that its bad poetry...cos i like it, however, i dunno, its just all tackling the same ground

sorry if that offends, as thats the last thing i want:)

[crackforkids]

***EDIT***

i found out my parents were swingers when i was on mushrooms... sucked.

[joker]

a lot of my feelings expressed in ya poetry dawg. keep it up. ya could be famous one day. ya outta start readin ya poetry at an open mic night somewhere.

[wizarddrew77]

Your a great Poet already-EXPRESS YOURSELF!

[Jack_Straw2208]

I see my future, and I'm laying dead in a oblong box.
There are no moments left for me barried beneath the dirt, and rocks.
My life has no meaning, it has no substance.
I have just been clinging on to life with drug induced incompetence.
Wish I knew how this story ended.
ok, this is the last attack i am making on your poetry (probably)..

so let me get this straight. you know that your life sucks, you know that you're pissing away your life with drugs and whatnot, and you recognize why everythings so fuxored... but instead of putting down the pipe and/or trying to fix problems, you just write poetry and keep doing it...

muuuuch better and smarter..

[wizarddrew77]

His using his Potery as an outlet to do that if you read what he said-It's his way of dealing with his shit and the way most famous-Artists-Poets and whatever have since we could speak. At least HE is admitting he is hurting most people cover it up by telling everyone else what to do! Or even worse thinking they are doing just fine and everyone else is fucked up.

[velvet]

ok, this is the last attack i am making on your poetry (probably)..

so let me get this straight. you know that your life sucks, you know that you're pissing away your life with drugs and whatnot, and you recognize why everythings so fuxored... but instead of putting down the pipe and/or trying to fix problems, you just write poetry and keep doing it...

muuuuch better and smarter..
I wonder who's the one with the issues here.. nice going dude.. you must be sooo perfect. His poetry is pretty good, his feelings are very open and honest and his life ain't that easy.. can't you just get over it? Have you never felt lost? My bet is that you were pretty shelterd all your life.. back off..

[Jack_Straw2208]

no, thats not what im saying, i know i'm flawed, but i do try and work on the things that i can.

this kid just keeps writing poetry and shelling out attitude...

poetry will only get you so far. poets with such an agressive personality almost never succed..

anyhow, i'm just saying, you can write your poetry, but the kid contradicts himself so much...

"i dont care" one second then "FUKC U U NOTALNT LOSER!!1!" the next.

if your situation sucks that bad, and you recognize the problem, fix it. stop doing drugs, stop fucking at the tender age of 13, and stop having such an attitude.

there are legions of folks who have it worse off than you, and they arent doing drugs or have such shitty attitudes. just because your life sucks doesn't warrent the behavior.


also, the kid said he was much better and smarter than me. thats what i was refering to, im not saying im better and smarter than him, just making a reference to one of his posts... its great that hes creative and all that jazz, but you cant get along on JUST poetry...

[Jack_Straw2208]

His using his Potery as an outlet to do that if you read what he said-It's his way of dealing with his shit and the way most famous-Artists-Poets and whatever have since we could speak. At least HE is admitting he is hurting most people cover it up by telling everyone else what to do! Or even worse thinking they are doing just fine and everyone else is fucked up.
no, i know i've done stuff to piss people off, and usually i try and fix things up with them. im not telling him what to do, or trying to bully him, im just criticizing his behavior. feel free to criticize mine, just make sure it's thought out and understandable. putting things in poems is a coping method, but obviously, his situation sucks pretty bad, and again, poetry is only a way of coping. if you recognize your flaws, try to fix them. if you have not good shit going down with other people, talk to them. try and work stuff out. the only stuff you really cant help is your parents and tweakers you pissed off.

and i know im fucked up... obviously im pretty neurotic... but i try to help that.. i could've just told the kid that he and his poetry are fucking retarded and so on, but i didnt. i told him i dont like it, and why, and then he gets all offended and angry, and now we're here where we are.

everyone's got their problems.

[velvet]

Feeling pretty much upset
should've never gotten out of bed

don't know what to do or what to say
to make everything go away

I want to be there close
and kindly kiss your nose

keep my arms around you tight
untill everything is just right

but maybe if I post this lousy poetry
it will show you my loyalty

that I truly love and care
and have a heart to share

This is poem really getting lame
since I'm not doing this for fame

I just love you so damn much
want to be there for you and such

blah this hardly even rhyhmes
but I'm paying for my crimes ;)

Hun, please don't be mad
it makes me soooo sad :(

[fulmah]

Don’t ever stop writing, dsk; you have a knack for presenting raw emotion through your poetry in a way that can’t really be taught. Maybe it’s just the subject matter, but your stuff kinda makes me think of an angry Bukowski (btw, if you haven’t read much of his stuff, you should; I think you’d really, really like). You got a ways to go to get there, but you’re well on your way… keep it up!

-shining star- is excellent… fantastic tone and your use of repetition is just what it needed. Good job!

[velvet]

shining star

I love you

As old friends we meet
With blood on our hands

You gotta be strong
I’m really scared
It’s been so long

The drugs that you take
Take me as well
I’m going with you
Straight through hell

Difference is you’re burning
While I just stand and watch
I see you yearning

Please stop crying
And hun, keep trying

I love you

[gdhmomchild]

Both poems, well done and compliment each so well. ty both dsk and velvet.

[velvet]

They couldn’t handle it

Not the way we did



For me it’s been many years

But there are still those tears



Sweety it’ll never heal

He will always be real



Gotta learn how to cope

Without all the dope



Face life clean

You’re only thirteen



If I’d loose you

I’d loose hope too

[velvet]

Dont you turn on me, boy-I've been thru thick and thin with you-defended yuo many a time even when you werent around-dont you let some hoochie come between us-so get your head outa your ass and remember who your friends are. nevermind.. I'm not going into this again..

[monosphere]

Dont you turn on me, boy-I've been thru thick and thin with you-defended yuo many a time even when you werent around-dont you let some hoochie come between us-so get your head outa your ass and remember who your friends are.
Why is it that one has to dislike someone else in order to gain your friendship? That's horrible! One person in particular was sooo looking forward to meeting you until you cut off ties with her due to liking velvet. it's a shame that your hatred controls you so much that you let it dictate who you'll befriend in the process.

Maybe you've been there for dsk, but velvet has been there for him as well. IS she not allowed? what are the prerequisites for helping someone? Hmm... they're friends with Blackie, so I better stay away. FUCK THAT!!!

I have friends who hang out with people I just can't stand. I have good reason to dislike them and they feel they have good reason to dislike me. But when it comes to our mutual friends, I don't talk shit about them and they don't talk shit about me. We like to do something kinda unique. it's called keeping the peace! Velvet is trying to do so. And she's not making her friends choose who they can associate with.

Doopesick- I know this is your poetry thread. I'll remove this if you'd like. I just thought it had to be said.

[HippieAngelMom]

This is good stuff, keep on going, I can read ur shit all day!

[HippieAngelMom]

Silent Night

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Its a silent night.
As my world dies.
Theres nothing left to say.
Other then goodbye.

Im to tired to fight.
To tired to speak.
To tired to say Im right.
To tired to give a fuck about my life.

I stare into the candle light.
As it burns down to nothing then fades away.
Just like my life does each and everyday.


Ya I feel like that alot ....I don't care what these people say, I like your stuff. Keep on going, I want to read more.

[Jack_Straw2208]

finally, i have some material that you kids can point and laugh at.

its not POETRY firstly, its designed to be lyrics, but i guess all lyrics are are poetry with music behind it, so yeah, here's my song fried... i'll get all the music uploaded (the song is writen on guitar, but i'll overdub bass, accordion, bongos, and possibly trumpet in there)
loosly based on robotrips, pot, and the imagination i had the day i ate 6 nodoz pills..
i have some of the chord progression in there because i wrote it in 15 minutes when i was stoned... lol...


G C F
couldnt taste the plastic nor could i hear the wind
firey chairs, yellow stairs, too much i would spend
because, there is a reason for candy that is bitter
melted lives, abundant eyes, grey matter considered litter.


G A E
well i'd sit and i'd fry, i'd watch the cars go by,
G C F C
a back with poor posture that isnt quite slouched
G c F G
and i'm slowly melting into the couch..


flipping the channles, blowing my mind
one of thems cushions, they sneak up from behind
taken by surpise, i've been knocked on my ass
vision's getting blurry, everything's moving to fast.

crawling desperatly, i reach the nexus
the EVIL RADATION doesn't quickly effects us
they started to run from the white, blinding light
sooner than later, fucked was their sight...

shit

and so i'd sit and i'd fry, i'd watch the cars go by,
a back with poor posture that isnt quite slouched
yeah i'm slowly melting into the couch..

time goes by slower and slower each second
when not eaten by shoes, it is almost pleasant
finding the true meaning of things understood
a binary mindset- confused with a purple road.

they were out in the lawn and they were bare ass naked
trying to figure out what the rocks had really said
spun whacked and ripped yes and really stoned
the guy in the tree said "update my head phones"

yo


so i'd sit and i'd fry, i'd watch the cars go by,
a back with poor posture that isnt quite slouched
and i'm slowly melting into the couch..

[Duck]

I hate you real bad and figured these would suck but I have to say these are pretty damn good, I think they will appeal to more people then alot of other poetry will

[sylvanlightning]

erasing quoted poems

[natural23]

Began reading, and in some places skimming the text, last night. I found myself stunned and transfixed. This young man, DSK, has heart; he is, clearly, an honest, kind, soul. I know that DSK has already changed many people. And if DSK survives for many years, as I pray he does, and grace is still with him this man will influence many people; he will change our world for the better. This man is evolving. DSK if you can see this message, please survive; find a way. I know that many people here share these thoughts. DSK fight, transcend, survive.

All people have expectations and even those who help another are doing it out of their own expectations. Now, here, I am not using the word "expectations" as one might expect; not a typical connotation but, instead, I am saying that we are all true to ourselves even when we give to or help another. Why do we know of, and feel, something called love ?

DSK you appear to be discovering cruelty, and take a lesson from a man 3 times your age we are always being surprized. You are open so listen to this, if you will: convert the pain by acknowledging the truth of your experience including your hopes and dreams. I should say that you obviously already do this, keep doing it. You are a profound manifestation; be proud of yourself; protect yourself; nurture yourself; cultivate yourself. And develope sophisticated indifference with those who mean you no good.

Here is a story, the "wild part", in my view, is not the most important but instead the part about, as I refer here, Love and "facing the self" is the most important part. The friend who was injured and passed onward is my Grandmother.

http://www.hipforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=102848

David
AKA 23

[Jack_Straw2208]

hmm.. the forum is messing up..

[velvet]

Since DopeSickKid's entire profile and therefor all his posts got deleted, the poems are gone as well. Therefor hereby all the poems again (at least the once I still have).. because it's a shame that this great poetry got deleted!

THE POEMS
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I Can't Be Perfect, So Fuckoff, And Die

I can't be perfect, no one can.
If you try to reach out, and save me I will bite off your fucking hand.
Leave me alone, I'm better off on my own.
Besides walking alone is all I have ever known.
Take your lectures, and shove them up your ass.
I have already forgotten you, ya your a thing of the past.
I have never loved you.
I don't know what love is anymore.
Your just a shadow, just another fuck to ignore.
Don't bother me with your bullshit, its just another lie.
I Can't Be Perfect, So Fuckoff, And Die.
__________________________________________________ ____
No Way Out

Bones heal, but my scars never will.
I numb myself to escape all the horrible pain I feel.
On the inside I feel so empty, cuz the world has stole everything good that was left inside of me.
I try to dig my way out of this hell I'm in, but the world swallows me, and drags me back in again.
There is no way out for me.
I'm lost at sea.
I'm broken like a piece of glass on the floor.
Being stepped on, and treated like a whore.
I am right now wishing I was dead, but in reality I already am.
__________________________________________________ __________
Drug Doll

You say your my friend, but all you do is pretend.
The more you fill me with shit ,and lies.
Another part of me dies.
As if you even cared at all.
You make me feel like your drug doll.
With no thoughts of my own. I will live fast then die alone.
In a world of piss, and shit.
I live like a speeding bullet.
My candle wont burn long. Before you know it I'm gone.
Dead, and in my grave, cuz there is nothing left of me to save.
__________________________________________________ _______
No Smile

I havent smiled for the longest time.
I have smiled when told to or to make someone feel welcome, but not a real smile
If I could just smile for a minute it would be grand, but my smile is lost deep beneath the sand.
People ask me "Why you so angry man" I reply with I don't know I'm just not happy, and have tried everything that I can.
Drugs helped, but they aren't real.
They just numb everything all the bad shit you feel.
My smile is somthing I desperatly need to find.
Until I do, nothing will ever ease my mind.
__________________________________________________ ________
Oblong Box

You said you would be with me whenever I needed you.
Even though You have stranded me at a time that I really do.
Left here with my demons haunting my head.
I don't think there is a soal that can save from ending up dead.
I close my eyes, and see my future laying dead in an oblong box.
Lifeless, and alone beneath the dirt, and rocks.
__________________________________________________ ____
Mountain

I keep on climbing this mountain, but it seems to have no end.
It has taken so many people from me it seems the the devil is my only friend.
I feel like giving up. I feel like turning back, but there is nothing left to turn back to.
You push me in my back. You tell me want to do. Even though you don't have a clue the shit I am going through.
Well I say you suck you self richeous fuck besides who the hell are you.
Preaching to me about staying clean about all the horrors you have seen.
All the while you fail to realize I'm living the shit every goddam day.
A life of broken dreams.
__________________________________________________ ___________

Stormy Night

There is nothing like a stormy night.
Soothing sounds of rain, and the flashes of light.
Makes me peacefull on the inside.
I kneel on the couch, and glance out the window.
Watching the rain pour down, and hearing the wind blow.
Its such a calm place to dwell for a moment.
It's such a priceless feeling, and no greedy fuck can buy it or own it.
__________________________________________________ _________

Your Blue Eyes Are Turning Grey

You mean more to me then life it self.
I care so much for you it hurts.
I see you hurt yourself everyday, and I'm starting to see your life fading away.
Your blue eyes are turning grey, and the sparkle in your eyes meant so much to me.
If I lose you. All the love I have I will rip out, and toss it into the deep dark sea.
The shit in your viens is killing you, and I don't know what the fuck I can do, to save you.
__________________________________________________ _________

Shallowness

Your so shallow it is sickening me.
How can I trust your when all you do is decieve.
You can't see who I am or see the pain in my eyes.
All you see is my skin, and fill my heart with lies, lies, lies.
You make judgements without knowing who I am.
I'm trying to reach you, but I don't think anyone can.
You fill yourself with false security.
You fill yourself with shallowness, and your heart will always be empty.
Two dimensional thoughts will destroy you in so many ways.
Your just another rat getting lost in lifes maze.
__________________________________________________ _________
Lastnight

I can't remember a thing bout lastnight, its all such a blur.
Must of drifted away somewhere, into another world.
I got so high, because I really love to fly.
I don't care if I die, because its the only thing that makes me feel alive.
Its my friend my friend to the end, and I will do it again, and again, and again.
Its such a nice warm place to be, and I never ever want to leave.
__________________________________________________ _______________

My Eyes Go Black

Your fist hits my face, and bloodys my lip.
Then Rage fills my head, and I start to lose it.
My body goes numb, My eyes go black.
__________________________________________________ __________

Soon

My skin is still warm, but inside I'm cold, and blue.
Never wanted to be close to anyone. Not even you.
I feel so far away from everything, and everyone.
I wish I did'nt feel this way. I wish I didn't feel this way. I wish I didn't feel this way.
Still I do, and don't understand why, but my mind is like this everyday.
Theres no relief insight, no one that understands.
They just want me to smile, and fullfill, there demands.
I am trying everything I can to make you happy.
While I remain miserable trying to be somthing I just cannot be.
You put a thousand pounds on my back, and expect me to stay in line.
I can't hold this weight much longer as I keep on falling further, and further behind.
I told you that I would kill myself if you did not help me more.
You will pay for this shit when you find me dead laying on the floor, cold and blue.
Soon.
__________________________________________________ _______

Death's Door

Theres no hope in sight for me anymore.
So I am taking a walk to death's door.
I'm gonna open it this time, and walk through the doorway.
I have been here before, but never willing to go this far.
My body is cut up, my mind is so weak, and my soal will always be scared.
I just want to set myself free.
Leave this world behind, and go on with out me.
__________________________________________________ _______

Somthing Real

You make me feel like there is someone that doesn't want to hurt me.
It is somthing my broken heart so desperately needs.
No one has ever understood the pain, and hell I'm going through.
Now I know there is someone that has always knew. Its you.
I cry on the inside every goddam day.
But for a moment you make my sadness go away
No matter what happens to me. I will always remember how you made me feel.
You made me feel like I was somthing real.
__________________________________________________ _________

Why Didn't You Love Me

I hate you so much you basterd for hurting me.
I have nightmares everynight, I can't fall asleep.
Why didnt you love me, I tryed everything I could.
I wanted so bad for you to love me, but you never would.
The memorys of you still haunt my mind.
It hurts my heart so bad I just want to die.
I wish you would have killed me, like you did to me on the inside.
You feel no remorse for the pain, and hell you put me through.
Goddamit dad I fucking hate you.
__________________________________________________ ______

Awake, and Alive

I get this heavenly vibe going through my body, and soal.
Like a bright blue sunny sky, with a soft warm breeze.
Feels as if nothing could go wrong, and all my pain is gone.
I take a walk down the shore line hearing the waves splash.
Its such a calming sound I feel it in my bones, and in my heart.
Thats when I know I am still awake, and alive.
__________________________________________________ ___________
Darkness Of Depression

I drift away into the darkness in my mind.
Like a Sunny sky, as a huricane rolls in.
It swallows me up, and never lets me out.
Theres no one there to save me.
No one to hold my hand.
No one to set me free.
No one to take a stand.
No one to kill the monster that is killing me.
The darkness of depression rules this land.
I lost my light, and can not see.
It feels like I will be lost forever in the land of the damned.
Inside My Mind.
__________________

Die With A Smile

The rush is so stong, but it doesn't last long.
Before you know it your whole life is gone.
Still don't care about the risks, and the jive.
I would kill myself just to feel alive.
I won't say my prayers save that shit for later.
It's as if I ever cared. At alll.
I just wanna go out have fun get a tan from the sun.
Leave my head for a while, and then die with a smile.

[velvet]

(and the rest)


__________________

Walking In The Rain

At this moment I feel calm, and my mind is clear.
I'm thinking of you, and wishing you were here.
One thousand miles seems so damn far, but I will still love you no matter where you are.
I feel so much for you it's so hard to explain.
You make me feel like I do when I'm out walking in the rain.
Free as a bird, holding on to your every word.
My feelings for you will never fade away.
__________________

Horrible Dream

Everything is changing, and I feel like I'm in a tornado.
Its all moving so fast, but I'm moving to slow.
I can't keep up, I can't let go, I don't want to lose all the people I know.
You say its all right, you say its ok, but if it is then why am I feeling this way.
You don't listen, you don't hear me. I feel invisible, and I don't have any relief.
Youn don't help me, you don't comfort me, and it feels like I'm deep asleep in a horrible dream.
Wake me up.

Betrayal

Behind my back is where you stand with a knife in your hand.
Your ready to stab me with your betrayal, and your apathetic mind.
Your words of betrayal cut me deep, cut me so deep inside.
It hurts so much to feel your knife inlodged making me bleed.
You run off, and leave me here to die, and rot.
I thought you were my friend someone I could trust, but like everyone else your not.
It Hurts.
__________________
All That Matters

I wish life could be more kind.
Somthing I, can not find.
Its hard enough just to live my life.
Even harder when loving someone
Still it don't matter what you do
It don't matter, because I will still love you.
Either treat me like a friend, or love me as your brother.
Loving me is like loving the dead
I will always love you my dearest friend.
It doesn't matter what you do.
All that matters is I will always love you.
__________________
Torn

You inflict pain on the weak.
Your evil is at its peak.
What more innocents shall you seek.
Where you will take a leak.
Your asleep, but still awake.
You never give, but you always take.
your torn heart is going to make my heart break.
I can read your lips, and you are a liar.
Setting my mind, body and soal on fire.
Heroin.
__________________
Writing

Writing helps me heal, and ease my pain.
The words flow for me like pouring rain.
It eases my mind, and sets my heart aflame.
It helps to remind me just who I really am.
I don't know if the words come from my heart, or from my soul.
Or if the words will stop the day I don't hurt anymore.
My writing won't save the world, or feed the poor.
Still writing saves me, and I hope it will always have this allure.
_____________________
My Only Light

Your the only thing good in my life, and I'm so fucking lost without you.
Your the only light I have left to help me see through the darkness.
You taught me how to love at a time when I had none left inside.
At times I felt helpless you were always the first to be by my side.
Love is the only thing in this world that can't be bought, stolen, or sold
It can only be givin, or recieved, and its a gift that will never get old.
I don't need a thousand friends to feel love from another.
If I have a friend that would stick with me closer then a brother.
_________________________________
From Sanity To Insanity

Crystalized memories inlodged
deep within your subconscious mind.

Inviting emotions,
which consume the fire,
that emptied the beauty of your intense eyes.

The shallowing river banks, which held your lifeforce,
are now polluted and drained.

Polluted by the poison, shot deep,
inside your withering viens.

You hideaway from the love,
that longs for you,
like dried up grass
pleading for cool summer rains.

Agonizing antagonistic demons,
chip away at your sanity,
demanding you to surrender
the final bit of sanity you possess.

As you struggle to remain afloat,
within heavily troubled waters,
I beg to be consumed by your beloved caress.

I agonize from your agony,
which hurts me

no less.
__________________

Suicide Note

Im just another furture suicide
I was born to lose.
Take your hatefull mind
just dig my grave if it satisfies you.
I dont have a future
I don't have a soal anymore.
There is no love left inside of me.
To you Im just a broke down junkie whore.
Right now I have a gun to my head.
I wanna pull the trigger, but Im to much of a coward.
As if anyone cared anyway.
No one would miss me.
There is nothing I can offer.
To earn someones love.
No one needs me here.
To my mom Im just a useless pansey
Just a immoral queer.
My inside is empyty.
My existance is meaningless.
I never hated anyone except for myself.
I hate myself for being broken.
For being so useless.
My life isn't worth living.
My life isn't worth a dime.
No one will ever love me.
For the piece of shit I am inside.
Take your hatred out on me.
Thats all Im good for.
I will see you all in hell.
I hate everyone.
I always will.

____________________________________
I dream of you in sweet, sweet dreams

Look into my eyes, and you will see.
Your all I need.

Give me your heart I will never hurt you.
Just as the sky will always be blue.
I will always love you.

When I look into your eyes.
I want to see your love for me.
We will live in love as if it was a dream.

I used to go where eagles dare.
Living my life without a care.
Your love soothed my soal.
When Im with you I don't hurt anymore.

I dream of you in sweet, sweet dreams.
____________________________________

We Are One Soul, One Heart, One Mind.

To Maya

Beyond the human comprehension of what existance is,
I will love you beyond that.

I will love you until my existance is gone,
when my lifeforce is no longer alive,
and if there is a being beyond that,
I will love you then as well

My love for you goes deeper,
then anything I can comprehend.
Its bigger then myself,
and means more to me then my life.

We are meant for eachother.
To live forever as one soal,
one heart, one mind.
Beyond the end of time
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My Blood

You scar your beautiful self.
Even though your my only light in my darkness.
When you cut yourself you cut me as well.

I want to kill myself.
The only thing keeping me here is you.
Your all I love in this fucked up world.

I hold this blood stained razor blade in my hand.
It has cut into me many times before.
I ponder this as it slices through my skin.
as I feel the old familiar sting.

The poison is rushing through me veins.
I feel the buzz as my own blood rains.
Theres nothing left of me anyway.
Im dead inside.
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Thirteen

Im thirteen, but I have no concept of childhood.
I never had a chance to live one, and I never will.
I live in this darkness my inner hell.
Locked in this prison forever in my torture cell.

There is no light, there is no blue sky.
There is just me, and me wanting to die.
I hate myself so much, and dont even know why.

I see all the kids play, and live carelessly.
I would die for a chance to just let go,
and set my mind free.

This blood stained razor blade is my only future.
I will live my life hurt, and I will die hurt.
Then I will be at peace six feet beneath the dirt.

Which is my future.
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Silent Night

Its a silent night.
As my world dies.
Theres nothing left to say.
Other then goodbye.

Im to tired to fight.
To tired to speak.
To tired to say Im right.
To tired to give a fuck about my life.

I stare into the candle light.
As it burns down to nothing then fades away.
Just like my life does each and everyday.

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Life Of Pain

She Brought me up just to let me down.
caressed my heart just so she could rip it apart.
Gave me some hope even though it was just in my dreams
proving to me nothing is as it seems.
She is just another person that has hurt me.
Just another painful memory.
In reality she was never really there.
Loved her to death as if she ever cared.
As I move on in my life of pain.
I guess I'm the only one who is to blame.
To think I will ever have happiness is nieve.
Somthing I should never ever belive.
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Heart Broken

I have been crying everyday.
The pain of heartbreak is hell.
My thoughts of you just cause this pain to swell.
MOre, and more, more and more.
As I sit here on the floor crying and writing.
The pain will always win whats the use of fighting.
Its just another heartbreak for me out of many.
just some more pain which I have plenty.
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A Little Bit

A little bit of love.
A little bit of soal.
A little bit of heart.
Just be my friend until I grow old.

Never knew I needed anyone.
Until I Met You.

A little bit of pain.
A little bit of humility.
As I cry myself to sleep.
I don't expect any empathy.

Never knew I needed anyone.
Until I met you.

Never knew I needed anyone.
Until I met you.

I Love you.
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Razor Tongued Devil

Your A Razor Tongued Devil.
Tryin To Break Me Down.
I Won't Let It.
My Soal Is Stronger Then Yours.
My Heart Will Beat Longer Then Yours.
My Love Will Be More Real Then Yours.
Your Just Another Noone That Everyone Ignores.
Forever You Will Be.
Forever In My Apathy.
Your In My Rearview Mirror.
As I See Things Cleaer.
Im Somthing You Will Never Be.
Happy.
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The Darkness

Darkness Is All I See.
Nothing, But Broken Hopes And Dreams Just Staring Back At Me.
Whether I Live Or Die Doesnt Mean A Thing.
Cuz I Have No Friends, And This Phone Will Never Fucking Ring.
Waiting For Someone To Be By My Side.
But To Them Im Just Another Meaningless Ride.
Is That All I Will Ever Be?
I Ask The Darkness Staring Back At Me.
I Get No Answers I Get No Empathy.
__________________
Teenage Whore

im a teenage whore just another nobody to ignore. Im a junkie but im happy so dont look at me with your indifferent eye. I love myself, even though I know Im gonna die.

Its all a game in this world. Nothing but money diamonds and pearls. You look at me when i bang my shit, but do i look at you when you smack up your bitch.

Ya im a teenage whore. Just another nobody to ignore. Nothing really matters. To a teenage whore.

My veins are weary from this shit in it. My ma thinks i should be in a fucking clinic, but i say my lies and then steal the money and say my good byes and drift away.

Like i do everyday.

Ya im a teenage whore. Dead inside with no feelings to live for. I ask the man do you want more? He says yes, you fucking whore.

19 mei 2005

shining star
you are after
my nightmares

comfort when Im lost
When Im found
my defender
When there is
Noone to save me

But the drugs
Take, take, take

I keep on
Hangin on

I Keep on
Hangin on

Do you really
Love me.

cus I
Love you

[Jack_Straw2208]

oooh, so thats why there are a bunch of empty pages...

why'd they delete his account?

[velvet]

oooh, so thats why there are a bunch of empty pages...

why'd they delete his account?
he got a temp ban first for pissing off someone but came back with aliases after that, which resulted in a perm ban and when he still came back with aliases, the deleting of his entire original account.

I don't really see why that needs to be done, because if that profile is already permbanned he can't access it anyway plus if you delete a whole account like this, it messes up threads real bad which makes it sometimes hard and annoying for other people to follow a discussion. But ah well.. I'm not god around here so whatdya do?

[bennyh]

tsk tsk dsk...