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Loveee
08-10-2004, 12:26 AM
Ive.been.here.before.

Aside.the.garden,atop.the.moon
Gleaming.flowers,and.a.solid.tune

But,for.it.to.be.mustnt.it.be.not?
Oh!dreary.ponderings.on.a.summers.noon
I.kicked.alot.when.I.fought
that.knight.This.night,
I.left.him.screaming,unconcious.dreaming
Laying.in.a.grass.field.stark.naked.bleeding
Only.to.wake.up.revealing...

a.butterfly.

From.the.forest,It.came.so.soon
A.butterfly.upon.the.moon.

KittenX
08-10-2004, 08:43 PM
Meah...you're trying too hard for the 'look at my unique style' gig.
Some might dig it and find it invigorating but I find it annoying and distracting from the poem.
A forgetable piece. Was this a stylistic satire?