China my Love

[BlackBillBlake]

This is a song really, but I think it reads ok as poetry.......



China my Love.



China my love

When will you come to me the way you used to do

In ancient times?

China my love

You’ve got that far away look

Behind Christian d’ior eyes

China my love

I see you there on the cover

Amnesty magazine

They’re always talking about you

China my love

It can’t be true

China my love

What is that I see so red upon your hand?

China my love

I don’t understand

China my love

It can’t be true

All those artefacts

Produced by slaves in you

China my love

Hope we’re not tooling up

For another opium war

China my love

It’s such a bore.

China my love

Touch me now

With your ancient hand

Before your ageless dragons

All take flight

China my love

I want to make it right

China my love

I’d love to wander through

Your ancient arts

Of love and wonder

China my love

You executed over 2000

Prisoners in 2001

Many publicly

China my love

He’s got the patience

Of a Buddha

But you’re standing on his foot

China my love

I can’t go on like this forever

Nor can you

China my love

I’d love to love you

Love you to

Love your people too.

[KittenX]

The only complaint is the over use in my opinion of -China my love- throughout the poem/song. Although I'm sure it doesn't effect the actual song. Other than that it's a great write.

[BlackBillBlake]

The only complaint is the over use in my opinion of -China my love- throughout the poem/song. Although I'm sure it doesn't effect the actual song. Other than that it's a great write.
Yes - I think it works better as a song. I did a rough tape, and it sounded ok. as a poem I agree it could be monotonous...