Vegetable Soup For Dinner

[lucyinthesky]

I shit this thing onto paper today
i tried to call it a poem
everyone stared when i pulled up my pants
i left some crumbs on the floor
it spelled out something different
like a-n-t-i-s-e-p-t-i-c s-t-a-r-e
i wrapped it up with a big red bow
and some pretty wrapping paper
i gave it to you, cuz i knew you'd like it
you love everything i do.

[fulmah]

it spelled out something different
like a-n-t-i-s-e-p-t-i-c s-t-a-r-e

this stuck out for me in a good way, the rest of the poem was great as well. started off aggresive and built up, then turned around in a nice way at the end.... good job :)

[inbloom]

yes, i love eeeeverything you do, you clever girl you. ;)