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TrippinBTM
11-16-2006, 10:56 PM
My first ever untitled poem. It doesn't have to stay that way, but I can't think of anything good for it; maybe you can. :)


Fire, water, joining, one
come together in the sun.
Elements discordantly
make love, and sing in harmony.

Yellow flame and running blue
mingle, mating, make a hue
unknown before, turning green
lovely, living, so serene.

Verdant growing all around,
meadows forests, in them found
newfound pleasures to embrace
feasts of color, blooms of grace.

Flowers, blossoms, colors bright!
dancing cheerful in the light.
My heartbeat speeding, on I stare
at beauty near too much to bear.

Red and bloody beats my heart
but in the green it has it's start
beating only for that shade
and all the colors she has made.

teh-horace
11-16-2006, 11:44 PM
nice flow

makes me happy

hippie_chick666
11-17-2006, 01:07 AM
Very good. I like your writings a lot, and this is one of my favorites.

Peace and love

TrippinBTM
11-18-2006, 07:11 PM
Thank you both. I am also pretty happy with this one, though I'm not entirely sure it says what I want it to, how I want it to. Oh well :)